A Thousand Voices

A thousand voices, inside and out

A hundred bodies, mulling round about.

Breathless and tense, seize my lungs,

spinning vision, no innocent ones.

 

All but invisible, my shell a tortoise

stock, still & silent, in a place full of noise.

Dancehall keeps buzzing, only changes the song

I'm trapped in a black hole, tumbling on.

 

I try to fall down, but I'm not that strong,

Only the brave ones, the brave ones are gone.

 

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but they are very good for your creativity, these thoughts.

"i try to fall down, but i am not that strong"

okay, there is a "wish i had written that" kind of line.

this just reeks of lonliness...being in a crowd and yet feeling so alone because we are too deep inside ourselves to feel others.

[Lonesome Traveler]

That's what I was trying to get across. Thank you for your lovely review!

[Joan*Eckhart]

This was great. You've put your feelings and emotions down so well.

[Deron Alexis]

well lets party then lol very well captured well written good comparisons and metaphors good writing my friend

[Lonesome Traveler]

Why thank you!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Well, welcome to my life...
Still, very well penned poem
Bravo...

[Lonesome Traveler]

Yeah, I've been feeling these kind of thoughts lately, and the only thing they're good for, is my creativity.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

indeed!