Tonights not the night

Tonights not the night

A Poem by Symphonic_Sunflowers

dont die tonight, just stay one more night.

Hold on tight, dont turn off that light,

please hold on with all of your might.

 

I know its hard, and i know youre sad,

but please dont go and drive me mad.

 

"Why did he do it, oh why oh why" theyll cry,

and im the only one wholl know why.

 

Please stay, one more night,

hold on with all of your might.

 

I know that i say this every night,

but please, oh please hold on tight.

 

I know everyone says it and its getting old,

but youre the greatest person i know.

 

So, i may be being selfish,

for saying this so,

but please dont go,

oh no.

 

Dont give into the dark, do not feed the shame, i know its hard for you,

to feel the same.

 

I know youre broken, and you cant find your pieces,

 

but please, give me some time, to find them,

to help piece you together again.

 

Just stay one more night,

please keep up the fight,

for i believe in your might.

 

Dont turn out the light,

dont give up the fight,

for i believe in you with all of my might.

 

 

© 2014 Symphonic_Sunflowers


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i really liked this piece...probably because i can relate to the feelings shared from both the speaker and the subject. yes, it is harsh but i think it packs a punch and a powerful message.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Thomas

7 Years Ago

i apologize if my critique lacks in any actual constructive criticism...i dont feel i know enough to.. read more
Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

Thats fine! I already know what i need to do it, im just too lazy to do it... :p
Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

also, i know what you mean
quite harsh I'd say, but very good. Keep up the good work:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

Why do you think its harsh?
Thankyou!
Reading the first three lines and and last three lines, a person could almost picture themselves standing on the sidelines of a football game listening to a cheer leaders chant. Hey, hey, whatta' ya say; take that ball the other way. I know this is a very serious topic, and I feel the readers can sense the emotional urgency you must have gone through to produce it. I'm no expert in the art of writing, so who am I to give advice. Having said that, I think if you clean this up a tad, you'll have something really special. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing! And I will probably add some more and touch it up a bit :) thankyou so much, M.. read more
M.E.Lyle

7 Years Ago

You're welcome, and I hope I wasn't too harsh. Never give up.
Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

You weren't, and really, i need that sort of criticism, if you will.
Because that's the reaso.. read more
' A friend in need is a friend indeed ' !

A frank and sincere poetic beseech, nicely penned !

Posted 7 Years Ago


Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much, Tom c:
Ohh yea!! Its not the night. I really liked the rhyming form of this poem boy.. Yea you are really gonna put up the pieces and make your girl strong.. very nice.boosted me up!!

~Sophy

Posted 7 Years Ago


Symphonic_Sunflowers

7 Years Ago

Thankyou so much, Sophy!

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I am a 20 year old woman who likes to write about the journey towards death we call life! I also like to review music that inspire me and my write ups! Check out my instagram! @symphonic_sunflowers more..

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