Leaf In The Wind

Wandering with the flow of the lifestream.

A blade on the wind

Drifts over mountains and fields

Looking for a home

Reviews

[Bacchus]

Sorry. You just don't seem to be the senryu type.
It needs more.
I bet you don't like brievity very much anyway.

[Bacchus]

Ok- I'll give you a real review on this...
Where does the dead find their home, only in the grave.
Another tragic end.

[Érenn]

I really love this haiku which can equally act as a senryu if viewed in a certain manner ^^ Great word choices. To express a journey of a detached leaf from it's parent tree that goes with the flow of the wind carrying it wherever the wind goes until one fine day it finally falls down and settles on the ground. The senryu here would be the journey taken by a man who has left everything behind and is going with the flow of life searching his appointed place and role in this world. Wonderfully penned. I enjoyed it a lot ^^

[TheRaven]

You've always got insightful reviews, and for that I thank you. And you definitely nailed home (Hah!) the nature metaphor of someone trying to find their way. Much love for the love!

[L u n a]

oh WOOW this one is very strong, I love the words you use especially the last one ''Home'' I have strugle a few years with myself to ''come home'' and now this poem means a lot to me. It is very strong and I really like it. The title is also unique ''Leaf Wind'' you are a very strong Poet.

[TheRaven]

Thanks Luna! I'm happy this has had that effect on you!

[L u n a]

hahaha it was MY pleasure