Day at the Park

Day at the Park

A Poem by Desiree Swendsen

Two women sitting on a park bench.
Their aged eyes glisten in the sun,
looking at them, it is impossible not to imagine
the life they’ve lived.

Two friends sitting on a park bench.
Smiling at the pigeons walking around their orthopedic shoes,
laughing about times past.
A history that would last a lifetime.

Two lifetimes, sitting on a park bench.
Time passing by like the cracked pavement beneath
the beaten up ’66 mustang convertible
that carried them away from the life they knew,
together.

Two hearts sitting on a park bench.
Reminiscing about adventures,
bare skin hitting cold water,
grass stains covering knees,
moldy couches in old basements,
moving through the world,
hand in hand.


Two minds sitting on a park bench.
Silently smirking at dark secrets.
Understanding the meaning of life;
Scraped knees and first kisses,
grandchildren and wooden canes.

Two friends sitting on a park bench.

© 2013 Desiree Swendsen


Author's Note

Desiree Swendsen
constructive criticism is always welcome. :)

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perhaps use the final stanza as an opening stanza too

and then -

Two women sitting on a park bench.
aged eyes glisten in the sun,
imagine
the lives they’ve lived.

and -

Two elderss sitting on a park bench.
pigeons pecking orthopedic shoes,
laughing about times past.
history to last lifetimes.

and -

consider getting rid of third stanza ?
better without I think

just some ideas for you
hope I have not overstepped


Posted 7 Years Ago


Desiree Swendsen

7 Years Ago

thank you :) and i do think that the 3rd stanza does seem a little out of place, it got aimed away f.. read more
umeus

7 Years Ago

my suggestions are a way to point to areas of inquiry - use what works for you - toss the rest. and.. read more

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Tags: old, friends, park, bench, memories, past, history, friendship, love

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Desiree Swendsen
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I have loved writing since I was a child, scribbling out stories about magic staircases and talking dogs. My 3 main interests are writing, animals, and psychology. I hope to combine all of them in my .. more..

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