Falling

Falling

A Poem by LozzaPotterInit
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Feelings :)

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And the rain came falling

Down,

Down upon my soddon face,

My face which held both sorrow and joy

 

The rain came falling,

Down,

Down to the sea

Washing away, to the waves which carry our wisdom

 

The rain came falling

Down,

Down to me

To say hello, before the goodbye

 

And the rain came falling,

Falling,

Falling to the bone dry ground

To wash away the mistreated


And the rain came falling.

 

© 2011 LozzaPotterInit


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Lots of poems have this vague nebulous feeling about them, and thats a good thing, leaving the reader to find an individual response. Yet at the same time poetry can be incredibly precise; I must confess to having a wobble of worry at the line " To wash away the mistreated " I thought perhaps that line could have a tweak.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Nice imagery. It is really amazing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Very Good pararde of rain,
Love the imagery in this write.
You are very talented.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very nice!! And beautifully written. Absolutely loved it. :')

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is a repeat read not an instant 'this is what it is about' poem. hmmm well written and intriguing

Posted 9 Years Ago


just love this, well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so good and so touching I love this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is actually amazing! I love the use of the words 'Down' and 'Falling'

It's amazing Well done!

:))

Millie.xXx

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

THANKYOU :D xxxxxxxx

Posted 10 Years Ago


OMG!!!!!!! This is brilliant :D - Lozza ♥

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 1, 2011
Last Updated on September 1, 2011
Tags: Rain, Dow, Falling, Sea, Wash, Sorrow, Joy

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LozzaPotterInit
LozzaPotterInit

Pompey, United Kingdom



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This is Lauren, no lie and I love poetry..... PROBLEM?????? ;D x more..

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