Dead Letter

i just felt inspired..read and come up with one..cheers!

Hello, 

Its been a week since i last penned. 
I would have spewed a plethora of words, 
but it seems something must have happened. 
I had a mixture of anger and delight, 
but mostly pessimistic because i thought 
myself you were trying to ward. 
But my African spirit of persistence 
has triumphed and shone me a light. 

So you said last time you will think 
about my blood burning question, 
I lie in bed,stare at my mat of a ceiling, 
silent,wink after wink 
every night,sometimes in fright, 
agony and plight 
sometimes in hope believing 
my day as a dog will come 
ironically listening to Florence's 'dog days are over'... 
Til i shut my eyes hoping to find a letter 
by my door.. 
just to tell me okay..or rather 'sawa' 

I do get letters. 
I get letters with the exact writing 
and exact words like mine. 
Only difference.. 
they're branded RTS 
and at the signing off, 
I get a warm 'Lotsa Love,Eddy' 
Wow..I love me.. 
Another dead letter. 

I fight my paranoia at times, 
fight my conscience 
read a dictionary,keeping sight 
of cliche and blase to avoid, 
hoping i wouldn't bore you. 
I write with a selection of words 
just to give a nirvana 
to your disturbed thoughts. 

Someday you'll answer back, 
someday,you wont ask me to lick your 
back, 
for an answer. 
someday you'll write back, 
someday you'll give meaning 
to my letters,and take my heart 
from this shack. 

Maybe,you'll bring my dead letters 
back to life. 
maybe you'll read my pieces 
and chop down your soaring ego., 

Maybe you'll bring my dead letters , 
back to life.

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[Stonz P.]

"Someday you'll answer back,
someday,you wont ask me to lick your
back,
for an answer.
someday you'll write back,
someday you'll give meaning
to my letters,and take my heart
from this shack. "

This is some powerful poetry.. Thanks for having visited my page, Edmund.

P.S.: you see the 'notepad' kind of sign below this in the line of the upside-down thumbs? Click on it to comment on my review.

[Edmund S. Obumba]

Hi Thaddius!
Thanks for the review..
If your letter was real..then we share some things in common
And hats off for the articulation!

[Thaddius]

These parts:
"Til i shut my eyes hoping to find a letter
by my door..
just to tell me okay..or rather 'sawa' "

"I fight my paranoia at times,
fight my conscience
read a dictionary,keeping sight
of cliche and blase to avoid,
hoping i wouldn't bore you. "

"Maybe you'll bring my dead letters ,
back to life"

My favorite bits. Powerful. Those parts don't have rhyme. I like the idea of playing with rhyme. But the truth seems to hit me in the parts where you just say it bluntly, in confession format. Maybe the rhyme comes in and goes away, and you reference it in a moment of self-consciousness.

Where you mention the dictionary, and saying how you hope it wouldn't bore - that's brutal truth. You'd second guess yourself as a writer with this person, and admit it to her. That's such a gesture and it comes across on the page. My letter was 100% non-fiction by the way!