Summers Dream

It�s now dreary out there by the sea.
Where once did I and my love
Dance amongst it to feel free.
Free from such pain and sorrow
That now has come crashing into me
Like the waves that came
And now echo the name
Of the girl of my summers dream

But alas she was taken by the sea
And when I pass by that town
in which the sea had laid her down
I remember just how it used to be
The sun did shine all the time
For us in our California fling
And we rhymed with rhymes
In poetic verses just to sing

But alas this summers dream
Is but a dream to be dreamed
No more love from the other
Who I once loved for a summer
For she left so wearily to the sea
So quickly did her grasp fade
Fade away from me that now I flee
I flee away from this town by the sea

Reviews

[The Elder Pine]

Its got a nice flow to it, a bit like that of the sea. I think some of the transitions may have been a bit raw and the repetition a bit too repetitive in some places but it is a nice piece. It conjures a good image in your mind, casting the summer saga of love and loss upon the walls of your cranium so that you minds eye might have the chance to take a look.

[Ice QueenJen]

I like this and it reminds me of my summer love. It was well written, but sad just like my summer love now gone so long ago.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

always love imagery of the sea, and loss...

'And we rhymed with rhymes
In poetic verses just to sing "

that was my favorite verse. great piece. melancholy, but lilting sweet