R A I N

An Ode to my favorite Weather

Coming down for everybody to feel
Cold wet air in the breeze
When you hit my skin everything's real
Don't you ever stop please

From the clouds in the sky you're so high
Are you god's tears from his very eyes
You're the rawest truth and never will lie
Turn it from the bluest to the greyest skies

Author's Note

It's either unfinished or something is missing I haven't decided yet.
RATE IT 1-10!!!

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

I am quirky in that I do not care much for rhyming poetry. With that said, this one is not forced, the rhymes flow easily... a very good thing. I love how you've made rain the topic and described it and not the emotions rain usually denotes. Your rhymes also have a solid rhythm a nice ba da ba da ba da to them. Again, great marks for keeping that. I would say, a 8 out of 10. Only because I think we can always improve our own work after it has sat and stewed a while. Well done, Jack.

[Eli Jarman]

Keep up the good work buddy ole pal

[ScoobyDooby]

youve managed to express my very own feelings about rain. this is very touching to me.. great job.

[DreamOn2014]

I think it is good. You could use a little more. But I wouldn't add to much more. I will give you a 7

[Jack Kennedy]

There was q last line but maybe it didn't flow with the poem or maybe it did???

[Wynter Ignatius]

Sadly I don't rate in arbitrary numbers but rather words.

I say it is wonderful the way it is - I too enjoy the rains when others too often fall into sorrow. Pure, cleansing and beautiful in it's own way.

Edit if you must, but this works just wonderfully.