father

he's lying down in the room breathing like a windmill cz he's tired from the heat I can't think of a better thing to do an ode to my dude

father

you're old

as the days come by

it's gedn harder and harder

to accept

that you're not young any more

I know a day will come when

you're no more and

I will have to live on more and more

just with the memories

you will never fade away

you will always be here

you will never go away

you remind me when fear strikes

you remind me of how I should use my might

always be right

forever be noble

don't you ever cheat

don't ever be

don't trust but be trustful

you must always be truthful

father you're alive now and so spunky

a few months from sixty and you've never been so feisty

but what's that I see pain

neck aches

oh what's that I hear

eyes strained

my heart breaks

I know this is not the end

it is the beginning of another time, we'll never be separate

I'll never say good bye

because then and there

my life's purpose would end

for I'll be dead

love you father dear, you're my best friend ever

Reviews

[Deon Visser]

Your opening lines were what got me, such a focused start. I really like this because it reminds me of the same motions my father is going through. I would have loved to see some typographcal playing with this poem to make it as beautiful as the intent and content. Well done though!

[Effector Prime]

Thank you very much Deon :) for your amazing review! rock on brother! :)

[Effector Prime]

I'm so glad you appreciate it for what it is.. my dad, I can't imagine life without him.. but I know the day will arrive when I have no choice but to go on.. without him.. but life is a very, very, very meticulously arranged illusion.. no one is inexistent though! no one is fake! but the setting, the premise, this is a school.. a playground where every time we get up from a fall, we progress spiritually.. I'm not a child anymore.. neither am I superhuman... I do have emotions.. at times overwhelming.. just too burgeoning.. and venting my insecurities and building courage has been a recurring tool that I fire through writing.. and I'm so glad that you liked it :) thank you and cheers :)

[Deon Visser]

I wish me and my father had a relationship, although I've addressed this with him it's still not there. I stopped writing for a long time and then picked up again, its always how it goes. Sometimes I write, sometimes I don't, sometimes it burns and sometimes I just turn around and sleep it off.

[Effector Prime]

write, write by all means, write.. for your state of mind will be done justice when it's expressed.. shutting it in is not unlike suffocating it's will.. or more, your will.. the subconscious plea of your inner workings to feel the light of day.. rock on brother! :)

[Namrata]

I loved this one from you.I notice how you talk about your dad.Old emotion in me tells me my dad is my hero, I will realize it again, towards the end. Meanwhile, I will just try to be as good as a daughter I can be.

[Effector Prime]

and you are Radha.. thanks for the awesome review! :)

[Saddam]

I'll never say good bye
because then and there
my life's purpose would end
for I'll be dead
love you father dear, you're my best friend ever.

Great poetry.

[Effector Prime]

thank you :)

[DIVYA]

A great poem on paternal love. I especially appreciate it as my dad is ailing with cancer. This is a lovely tribute. A fathers always stay with us.

[Effector Prime]

no one is ever truly lost.. that is indeed a very reassuring thought.. but our mortal self is configured to grieve at loss. I can see through all of this.. but I know the remorse will grip my being when I'm least unaware.. weak.. vulnerable.. tragic eh. no one is ever truly lost. thanks Divya for the lovely review :)

[DIVYA]

You are most welcome Effector.