Saturday

Light refracts off the lake,

Gracefully following the current,

As I watch my heart is in awe,

Images of you fill my soul,

Recalling the moments we've shared,

Entirely pure, in essence innocent and grand,

Never a night so changed my life,

Such raw emotion, it’s like your hand is still there,

Interlocked fingers with an unbreakable grip,

Passion glided wild, the skies were on fire,

We didn't act, our eyes met and we smiled,

The music playing escapes the mind,

As we made our own, epically tuned and fine,

Many nights & days have passed,

Never one though were this moment doesn't last,

I experienced most of life and so much more,

Memories like this are rare for sure,

Your beauty, heart, mind, and soul forever lace my mind,

This night of love was so unfathomable,

It could last me my whole life.

Author's Note

This is seriously a poem strictly for a girl whom I love so immensely, however it is not in our cards to share our love. We shared a beautiful weekend together and talk nearly daily. Our friendship is amazing and maybe one of my most treasured possession. We are working on a project in the near future to kinda go into business together. We are separated by states, school, and military obligations, so sharing my feelings with all of you will have to suffice until the time is right.

Reviews

[Astro]

There are some really well expressed thoughts in this one ES, but there are also some grammatical errors and spelling mistakes that for me takes me out of the moment in which you're describing. All in all, the scene and how it has affected you is apparent and the sentiments will surely connect with many a reader. A little bit of editing though, could turn this one into something much stronger.

[London's Lily]

This is a beautifully depicted memory, and your affection is very clear. I think my favorite part is:
"The music playing escapes the mind,
As we made our own, epically tuned and fine"
For you to have had such an overpowering feeling while with her, that you can't even remember what music was playing, speaks volumes. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Even without the note, I could feel the fight in this one; and the longing and yearning of a love that can never be. Sometimes all we have are our memories and the feelings that we can hold on to as little treasures. You write of beauty and awe, and to these are truly things that you will keep with you for a lifetime, even if the reality only lasted a weekend. Bittersweet... I enjoyed this one.

[Electric Scribe]

Thank you for the beautiful review. I am really excited because I am picking her up from Chicago next month and we are going camping/music festival. On the way we are going to devise our business plan to set things in motion for that project. I appreciate you finding the meaning in this piece. Thanks for visiting =)

[Zero_Edge88]

Before I saw the note, I thought wow, this man's lucky to have this wonderful lady in his life. Such emotion so very vocal. It is spoken through such great honor and respect for her. Wonderful woman this friend of yours is. Best of wishes to the two of you in your future business as it turn into something so amazing.

Have a great week Sir Warren and have a beautiful day today :)

[Electric Scribe]

Dude she is sooooooooooooooooooooooo amazing, love everything about this girl. The rarity of one whose physical beauty is matched by her inner beauty. Thank you for the beautiful review I actaully shared this poem with her last night, and she shared with me a beautiful messaage that brought tears to my eyes. I shared your review with her to and I quote Warren that's AMAZING!!!!!!!!! =))))))))) I am excited cause we are working/drafting the business plan next month on the way to our next amazing music festival together.