Tenses

Very experimental for me...

She screamed

She is screaming

She will scream

She bled

She is bleeding

She will bleed

She was hurt

She is hurting

She will hurt

She hated

She hates

She will hate

She made mistakes

She is making mistakes

She will make mistakes

She learned

She is learning

She will learn

She loved

She loves

She will love

Author's Note

Is it too repetative? Or just plain bad? Be honest:)

Reviews

[DemitriJ]

Not your best my sister but the feeling of this poem are the feeling of most. We are only human.... no irony intended there.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I kinda figured you didn't mean any irony, and I'll agree it's not my best... It could probably put up a fair fight for my worst actually:) But thanks for the understanding:)

[KeeD]

It's very creative :) it's not your best work but it's definitely something unique and I enjoyed reading it because hey she is human and her feelings I do understand now thanks to this piece :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thanks man:) I know this one wasn't one of my best, but I felt I had to write it, like I felt I had to write everything I've written:) And who do you mean?

[KeeD]

your subject, in general :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

ahhhhhhhhhh, i see:) I'm glad then:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

As a repetative poem it works very very well, It also flows perfectly which can be a mean feat in such writings, well done, good read.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thank you very much kind sir:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your welcome

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

:)

[Chris]

sometimes life is just tooooooooo ...

Actually I kind of find it ...fitting - both your poem AND life

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Howso?

[Chris]

...having memories while we live and make new ones... even nightmares.
just because we KNOW better - NOW - doesn't mean we did, didn't, do...
ya know?

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Yeah:) Thanks:) I like the way you phrase it:)

[Rob Santana]

Uuummm.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

What does ummm mean? Is it just that bad?

[Rob Santana]

No okay, this is just my opinion I m reading it backwards. For example your first 3 stanzas I think should read like this: she will scream she is screaming she screamed

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Well, I wrote it to mirror the flow of time in life, the assumption of what is to come, but you think maybe I should do it all as if I'm watching a movie and being that person who's always like, "now this is gonna happen, see it's happening, oh it happened?"

[Rob Santana]

Now that I that I read it again both ways work. Can't go wrong with this piece. I stand corrected.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thanks:)