James

Tragic accident

god chiseled me a path
for me to walk one day

god chiseled me a life
that i would live one day

god chiseled me a future
that i will not see

for you took me for granted
and now my life
wont be

for i got killed that day
the day you left me alone

in a house at the age of 5

enthusiasm
explorer

for a picked up the lighter
and set fire to Dora

with a second
came the roar
of ever heated flames

for i was once
a human
a person with the name James.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism say what you think please x

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think this is pretty good, Elle.....I would change the last few lines to sharpen it though...After enthusiasm/ explorer.(Which I think is a great line)...I would go for.....I set fire to Dora....she burst in to flames....I was once a human....A young lad known as James

[Ellejune]

I think this was one that I wrote quickly and did what I normally do and don't check before uploading I noticed the faults to
Thanks