Poetry

it grew wings and flew away. . .

Poetry is a place.

 

It's where I put my heart

and you pick it up to see.

 

My triumphs and scars

are engraved there.

 

It is impossible for us

to keep such things

to ourselves

 

and so we share.

 

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Poetry is a destination.

 

It's the hundred extra steps
between you and me.

 

Our hopes and haunts
are engulfed

In the lost ellipses
of forgotten worlds.

 

We cannot share
enough
to be completely found

 

and so we write.

 

 

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 <table cellpadding="4" width="300"><tr><td width="50" valign="top"><a href="http://www.writerscafe.org/link/310557/"><img src="http://www.writerscafe.org/uploads/stories/tiny/06501700-1205402944.jpg" alt="" border="0" /></a></td><td valign="top"><font size="2"><a href="http://www.writerscafe.org/link/310557/"><b>Metamorphosis</b></a></font><br />A Poem by Emily Burns<br /></td></tr></table>

 

Author's Note

The next incarnation of "Poetry" can be found in "Metamorphosis". I would include the link but I'm technologically deficient most days.

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

This was so beautifully written. You hold so much wisdom and truth here. You really made me look into myself with this as this felt so personal and truly like a part of yourself placed on a page. I am so happy that I got to read this. I really think you expressed this perfectly. This is going into my favorites so I can enjoy it again.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Thomas James Martin]

brilliant and these lines are so very appropriate for an ageing semi-recluse like myself:
It is impossible for us
to keep such things
to ourselves
and so we share.

Added 6/26/08: I meant to say the other day that I liked the first part the best, though both are nice.

Thanks for sharing this.
Tom

[Michael X]

Emily- there is much to this writing in way of drawing thoughts to ponder from the readers perspective
and firstly..the concept of connecting creartivity such as poetry with the heart- it defines this poem
in many ways.. the second stanza has touching effect in its raw - unbound forward emotion..and

one can fully feel the resonating voice behind the words.. in light of the meaning you've said a valume
of thought in the first two stanzas alone....as i continued reading the image became clear as to the
intent and that being how the artists creation bring the soul into existance. Subtle and excelling
approach bring your words to life-entwining passionate metaphor and wisdom.. I enjoyed reading this

[Dorchadas]

This is really beautiful Emily... the opening lines just blew me away:

"Poetry is a place.

It's where I put my heart
and you pick it up to see."

such an amazing concept... poetry being a place... really made me think
insightful and honest... really loved this ~smiles~ great work

[melanie j bean]

very nice!

[d]

...We cannot share
enough
to be completely found



and so we write...

...true indeed...always enjoy clarity in writing...respect sis...ONE::

[bluessadmood]

you know i never took a dive into poetry ,but your talking about it makes me think other wise,you describe it so beautifully ...Our hopes and haunts
are engulfed

In the lost ellipses
of forgotten worlds....wow this is really great ,i read it four times to enjoy the tunes in it ,you are lovely today dear Emily

[AK]

Nope, I don't think you should "put this one away". My unpublished heart feels every word.

[Angela H.]

Hi, Em. This is so true. I've never thought of poetry as a place, but it is. This is a new and wonderful metaphor for me. Thank you so much.

[Samith Pich]

I agree with Tompkins, writing poems about poetry is hard. Very few things are orginal, our words depend aim to cross divides of differences through the sharing/ confession of our own shared experiences however i think what seaparates good poetry from REALLY good poetry is for the poet to take this shared experience and try to give it their own orginal slant on it thereby providing the reader with a brief illuminating insight. What I'm trying to say this is a lovely poem, but some poems need more 'weight' on them so they don't lazily waft away into the ether. the world 'place' grounds your poem but your description could do with more concreteness.

As always, thanks for sharing your work. if poetry is a place then i'd like to think it's a place of learning.

[PianoandPage]

i think so far that you poetry carries a soft philosphical tone that almost undercarries the weight of your questions.

maybe what defines us as artists is the simple instinct to share ourselves. it's a refreshing and new perspective. i like the short and simple form you pose this. i don't think it needs more. i'd say it's finished.