Trepidation

another old one

Resolute

stood the mountain laurel

on the little hill.

Steadfast

held her leaves of green

to the noble sun--

and came along the little Bee

curious and bold.

His whispered words

of Trembling pulses

Yielded forth the prize.

 

Reviews

[I, Rene]

This IS very Emily like, it reminds me of a movie, an english man went up a hill and came down a mountain, I was so impressed by that true story made for movie, Like I am by this beautiful poem. To stand resolute in ones convictions, is a beautiful thing, so stand resolute while the bee whispers, well that's nature calling :)

[ba_mcfarlane]

It takes true talent to make it look like it is simple to do. This is a wonderful and disciplined write...Bravo!

[Emily B]

thank you :)

[Liza]

subtle tension building, imagery eases into emotion and profound perception of reward meeting its release.

[fargone]

beautiful and charming, emily. very cleverly written with a great flow to the words. wonderful :)

[Jasmine]

so beautiful!! I love how you've concentrated on a microcosm of life and turned it into an entire world. makes me hopeful...

[Desert Dreamer]

A vision of nature as something to look up to, we could learn a lesson from the Mountain Laurel and the Bee.

[Shellie]

excellent phrasing! its fab the way you start it with one word. Resolute.... stood the mountain laurel. genius.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Every word of this is perfect. Always wanted the talent of flattering nature with poetry, the way you've done here. Reflecting is maybe a better word than flattering. This is a pretty piece, but not the patronising kind of 'pretty'; it's just very pleasant to read and envisage so the reader tries to savour each line. Those uppercase letters are an intriguing touch. I like that Bee is capitalised (Proper )
:)

[Rossen]

Sweet and timeless, thanks for sharing this gem

[arbitrary jane]

so many of my favorite words are in this poem: resolute, steadfast, noble, curious and bold, trembling... and you've used them like van gogh colors in this exquisite painting.

[emmajoy]

Beautiful, peaceful and true .. such beautiful creatures, bees; and how they. need protection because apart from tending all things growing, we wouldn't have poetry like this.

Thank you for sharing.