Stone heart.

You walked away without a word,

Pierced through my heart with a sword.

You didn't hurt the heart even a bit,

For, it went numb when you stopped loving it.

You don't want to feel anything for me,

My tears, an overflowing sea.

I've been wrong all the way,

Couldn't walk from the night to the day.

You left me a half soul, a half heart,

When you went apart.

You grieve for me as if I'm dead,

So, leave a flower on my grave bed.

There's nothing that love can't (un)do,

Why for me it isn't true?

I die with every beat of your heart,

There's no love, they hit like a dart.

You say, you can't forget and forgive,

What about my heart, left to sew?

Why do you want me to die,

If on my death, you can't even cry?

Show some pity, if not love,

So heartless, you could be how?

Look at me, I shall soon die,

Say you love me, at least lie.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I also noticed you gave up on the rhyme scheme with the last two stanzas, which, unfortunately, made the piece suffer slightly...the ending wants to be pow-pow, you know? Like a smash and grab burglary...you want to shove your fist through the glass and snatch out my heart and run...this kinda fell short of that. But, as always, thank you so much for sharing it with us.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

I will modify it. Thank you. :)

[Ashly Christen]

I hear this like a song when I read it
a nice write :D

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you. :)

[E.V. Black]

Ooh, I'm shivering from the lover's frigidity right now! Wonderful. The rhyming really makes it, although it is awkward in some parts. Some words don't fit in at all with the intended rhyming scheme. Other than that, this was wonderfully sad and piercing. Very beautiful.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you. :)

[mike]

Wow. That was depressing a bit, but still kept my attention. It truly is the tale of a broken heart. I personally have met some people who treat others they've dated before with disrespectful attitudes. People like them may sicken me, but the fact is that people like that are everywhere, and avoiding them is near impossible. Envika, a truly moving piece, and hope future relationships don't involve men like the one mentioned.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you :) `Life has already become better. :)

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

It's sad to know that we'd rather hear a lie than the truth from someone. Especially if they mean a lot to us or have a past involvement with us. Anyway, the truth is always best than a lie. Though a lie may ease the pain alittle bit, but you'll soon want to know the truth because it may have been better to hear. The truth hurts, but its always better than a lie.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

I want to hear him lying to soothe my pain but the truth is well known to me. Thank you. :)

[Asya]

Wow that is a great poem. I could almost feel the power and hurt coming off in waves. Truly connected with you through the words. You mixed in so many emotions and feelings that I almost wasn't sure what to feel while reading. Really great write! You definitely have talent! :)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you. :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

Oh God so sweet and sad , i really like it so much ! well done .

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you. :)

[quinfinn]

some very powerful emotions here and they certainly hit the mark. i won't belabor the rhyme scheme change that others are talking about, you know about it. this piece would improve greatly with a little more attention from its very capable writer!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you Quin. :)

[David Scott]

"at least lie" ...
Sometimes we don't want to deal with the truth.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Yea. :)