Untold Pain

Sleeplessness due to problems makes a bitter writer

Lying beneath a blanket of stars

I cannot help but feel new scars

Pain and suffering still so fresh

Tear tracks wet and out of breath.

How can I help but feel betrayed

When each word you spoke was a mistake?

How does my heart ever heal right

When each promise broken was said with light?

Twisted and destroyed you wrecked my life

Turned me around, ate me inside

Apologies made of ice cold lies

Never gave a flinch or sigh.

Depression thick as inky blackness

Have the stars have died within my eyes?

Pain and suffering bound with hatred

Have the tears turned to molten spite?

No longer do I use your crutch

Trust your fabrication, feel your touch

Strong enough to pilfer my soul

I've twisted it, it's not my own.

Lying beneath a blanket of stars

I no longer feel these old scars

Pain and suffering no longer exists

Tears are only weakness of the flesh.

Reviews

[Kaylee]

Again, nice job! What I most loved about this was how you started out with the fresh pain and slowly turned it around into a memory, taking on a more positive and determined tone. Imitating the beginning stanza at the end was a particularly powerful way to get the message across, in my opinion. Nice job!

[Dark Rider]

This was just wonderful! I loved the emotion you put into it. I love your writing style. Great job! :)