The Blind

An attempt at rhyming didn't work out as well as I'd hoped but oh well

I know that I've been selfish

I know that i've been wrong

To try to force you into this this

To try to force you all along

 

I wish for you to be happy

I wish for you to be content

Even if it means for me to feel crappy

Even if it means for this to be the extent

 

You say that you don't like me like I want you to

You say that I'm closer to you then all your other friends

I truely believe you love her, I do

I truely believe you like me, I make amends

 

Love over rides the weaker emotion

Love over rides the unimportant

you can't see that u like me because love is a comotion

you can't see that I'm better for you because love is a deterant.

Author's Note

Please comment good or bad I want them!

Reviews

[paparapapa]

I liked the message that you wanted to deliver, but I think you were too caught up with the rhyming scheme that some of the lines felt forced. Also, there are typos (I think) that need to be corrected. But it was still a good read. Keep writing!

[Comatose]

I don't care if you say it's crappy, Isa like it! ^^