Tender Feelings.

My first poem. Please tell me how it is.

                                                             Tender Feelings.

She knew she’s odd

From how she chose to see

Often, what others ignored,

Things that just mattered to you and me.

Sadness in those happy eyes

Trapped somewhere so deep,

huddled in the joke was a hint of reality.

Often, what others ignored were the

Things that just mattered to you and me.

Thinking of life as a story

adding new page to it,

Hoping the ending would be happy for me.

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

I love the theme of the one who seems happy on the outside, the clown who makes us laugh, (with a little reality throw in) but underneath there is pain and sadness. I also like that there are two people who see the truth underneath, the subtle tells in an expression of word, and though it may not be me, the reader, as the "you and me", it feels like you're talking right to me, including me in the ability to see underneath the mask. Good write! Thank you.

[FATHOM]

Thank You!! :D

[Emily]

Great poem!!
Keep it up!!

[iamshadowine]

"Thinking of life as a story
adding new page to it,
Hoping the ending would be happy for me."

I loved these lines! They are so pretty and the way you've compared them to life is amusing :)
A lovable side is seen here from the poet's view :) I really enjoyed reading it!

TBH, doesn't seem like your debut poem, the composition is excellent.
Keep writing :D

[FATHOM]

Thank you SHADOWINE, I really appreciate what you said :D .

[iamshadowine]

you are welcome :D