All That

All that’s left of me..

Is the beautiful lie that was never created..

All the pills and f*****g butterflies..

Do you think of me?

I never really wondered if my life was worth more than suicide..

Even though once again I tried..

And I f*****g failed..

It’s like I’m not supposed to f*****g die..

Like I’m supposed to live in this agonizing form of existence..

Like I’m supposed to see death and disbelief right in f*****g front of me..

Like I’m supposed to be the pissed off old m**********r at the pub..

But none of you could understand..

Takes someone with my exact experiences to know how the f**k I feel..

But f**k it..

I’ll live on I guess..

Seeing how I apparently can’t f*****g die..

Oh my f*****g god..

I’m so f*****g furious..

But I can’t direct that feeling at anyone but myself..

And they say that everything’s gonna be fine..

That it’s just a bad dream come true..

It’ll be over soon..

Well f**k them..

F**k them all..

And I bid you goodnight.

Reviews

[Brook Hughes]

Great way of expressing ur emotions and feelings by using profanity:) lol... u must hav been pretty pissed when writing this piece:) keep up the good work:P

[Caradoc]

Interesting...

[Jibin]

Huh, i could see your feelings rather than a poem. And so it's so intense, and filled with anger. May it is because you are under stress. I don't know actually. But one thing is sure, some kind of stress can be spit out by writing down your feelings. If it helps just do it...
:)

[Rae]

I like it but, why are you so mad? Obviously if you're this angry, you must have some s**t in your life. So my suggestion? Direct that anger toward a goal so that you can get out of this pit of self-hatred and into a great and successful life! Keep writing!!

[nicolo]

Raw. Too raw to the point that it loses art. But I like it when it comes to that point. You dwell more in the heart of the matter which is much better. But it would better if it has balance.

[Alskar]

I love this raw, raw anger in the poem. In this case I think a 'telling' poem is acceptable because the aggression is carried across better. Too many ellipsis, though. They serve you well in showing sudden disdain, but there's a lack of sophistication in so many. Some people may switch off. This is like the inner workings of an angsty adolescent, which I really like.

[Carrion.]

i like this. It's very emotional, filled with anger. and an over use of f**k.
So you must have been going through a tough time when you wrote this. I'm sorry.

Very good piece.[x

[Tainted Devotion]

I can relate completely with this poem and how you feel. This brings me back to a time in my life when all seemed lost. You did a beautiful and remarkable job in telling this story, and what has been eating away at you. You are a very passionate writer. Keep writing. And I hope things get better for you....But once again...you did an amazing job...

[Becky C Strukamp]

Hostile yet passionate it right. WOW!! Filled with emotional struggle and pain. Very nice!!

[nevermindfan1991]

Wow, hostile, passionate, and profane! But very beautiful just the same. So much emotion packed into this poem. I felt it once again. Great Job.