Where were you?

They are bad for a reason.

When I was hurt, when I was let down, when I shed my tears, when I was breaking, You didn't notice.

When I was burning, when I was on the edge of tap out, when I beg, when I didn't have a choice, You ignored.

When i said " hold my hand", When i need to get shelter, When I wasn't prepared, You denied me.

When the monster ran out in me, When my burnt heart makes the devious mind, you came to count my malfunctions.

When I choses devil's path, when I was mistaken, you started backbiting. Called me bad.

You kicked me when I was down, And when I stood up, when I kicked the past, you gone back to my evil.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful, honest and strong words my friend.
"When I choses devil's path, when I was mistaken, you started backbiting. Called me bad."
The above lines stood out to me. When we only speak with a negative voice and tone. We create a mess and separation. Thank you Farhan for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you soo much for your kind review..

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[JessyJacob]

It reflects same for me too.

You kicked me when I was down, And when I stood up, when I kicked the past, you gone back to my evil.

How can somebody break, when they are ours, then they dont kick them, just they dont see with them.

I think one is sure accepting Honesty, helps everyone, no one is good. We need to pull good and bad separately, over exploitation is possible when we dont separate, and later what needs to be given for whom.

But people, do know what they are, i think when we make them ours, we never kick, until we break.

[sharmila]

very beautifully done i liked your second last line very much

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you 😊

[Harley Quinn]

Well done. You described your emotions in a unique way. I wouldn't mind reading more of your work.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Erica ...I'm glad😊

[Harley Quinn]

Your Welcome :)

[Red Rose]

Beautiful. It's direct and to the point.
And now you've reached the top of ur game! Or.. Do you have more to give?
Keep it up!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you redrose...lots of more to come..

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wow! Meaningful poem! A bit too sentimental...
I would advice you to write uniformly in one tense viz. Past.
Write short sentences covering the whole point(for reader's curiosity)
Give a structure, don't write in a tag.
Well done!!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you tazeen, I'll note it whenever next time I'll write such kind of subject😊

[Manu]

A good one, Farhan :-)

A sad reality. Life is like such we get to meet both kinds of people, some people stay and some people leave us in the middle of our journey. We get to know the true colors of love and friendship in tough times only.At Least, we can try not be like the ones who left us. Irrespective of whatever happens, we should not let others corrode our ideologies and thinking.

Very well written poem with lots of overwhelming emotions. Keep writing.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Absolutely right, than you gorthi

[Valentine]

Sadly not many do ask for help when they are down. Most just dig deeper into the hole they have made for themselves. Valentine

[Farhan Shaikh]

Right words..thank you for visit😊

[JessyJacob]

That is true in my case. If anybody have the option or attitude to help us, they would have come, but if we dont see them, where they can be seen, we just find out our own mistakes and dig deeper for anlaysis, what the mistake haas been done and how to get out from it.

[mercy party]

"burnt heart makes the devious mind". this line stuns the reader. This poem spoke harsh truth throughout. Another poem with great emotion. Great!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much..mercy

[Najam Us Saher]

This is a poem which talks about the human nature about how people don't help us and then start talking about us behind our back. It is aptly portrayed in this poem. Well written.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Right, well , thank you saher😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome :)