Dry-Fire

Dry-Fire

A Poem by Fegger
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A difficult place for a woman to be.

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She sits, emotionally bland,
Speaking mechanically;
Her right jaw, slightly misaligned,
From calcifications of former fractures;
And he is left-handed.
Lime-green circles about her
Distant, blue eyes indicate
That she has pleased him
This past week.
She believes that she
Is Improving, is better;
As the distance between
The necessary corrections
Is elongating, and she doesn’t
Nap as often.
He seems to love her more;
And frequently resorts
To audible amendments,
Or is too fatigued, himself,
To properly intervene
In her enlightenment.

She inhales, fidgets, re-adjusts,
To breathe without pain;
Calmly expressing accolades for
The strength, perseverance,
Of her son who doesn’t fail;
But weeps, in anonymity,
For her daughter who must
Have inherited her propensity
Toward weakness, malfunction.
Perhaps, over time,
He will see fit to guide
Their daughter with
Identical acts of love;
And she will be well.

She stares out the window,
Toward the windswept willow;
Catatonic, citing that
Past years, learning years,
Were resonating like the
Dry-fire echo of the
Empty Chamber in a game
Of Russian-Roulette.
The sound, repeated and
Sustained in dull memory;
The clicks that fed
The ugly tomorrows;
But her eyes sparkle as
She admits to a yearning,
For the strike of the pin
To fresh primer;
And she may only regret
That she will not hear
The Sound
Heralding her freedom.

© 2010 Fegger


Author's Note

Fegger
Copyright 2010, Fegger

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the unbearable pain is visible of the woman sketched.Nicely painted figure

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


the mind and soul are awake but the body is not aligned to behave freely - as if the woman is confined to live as a vegetable willingly or unwillingly....

Posted 13 Years Ago


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sad but good great job :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow this is a sad one! To take one's own life to escape the pain is a sad thought indeed.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy


Posted 13 Years Ago


THIS IS A BIT CONFUSSING...
BUT...
I DO LIKE IT...
MY UNDERSTANDING IS NOT...
ALL THE WAY THERE...
BUT...
I'LL FIGURE IT OUT...
I ENJOYED THE PIECE THOUGH...

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well written. There are no wasted words or meaning here. Excellent view into the mind of the voice. The short lines are perfect for this piece. It seems as if the voice is living through this poem a few words at a time. This plus the lack of over exposition give a precious feeling to every moment of her existence.
my only suggestion is to only have capital letters at the beginning of a sentence instead of every line. A capital at the beginning of everyline causes a pause in between lines and single thoughts were none is needed. Great poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


You show a depth of understanding the pain and suffering of abuse, the utter hopelessness and yearning for freedom. Beautifully written!

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is wonderful your so talented

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow...what a profound ending. This one read like a story. Again, great stuff.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on December 8, 2010
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