Illusion

A reawakening of true self.

Strolling down an unknown New York City street
Feeling alive as my feet
Hit the pavement in a foreign land
Yet knowing precisely where I am

Years later, I awake from an obsession
With just one heartbreaking confession
I'm not ready and I knew that then
What I most needed was a friend

Where are MY feet?
I forgot to ask MY self when under the spell of our power and heat
Pastor showed me three boxes, gave me one, and told me to choose
To pick box 2 or 3, I'd have to be willing of box 1 to lose

Excited, like an impetuous child, by the unknown treasure in box 2
I allowed myself to become enmeshed with you
Forgetting MY self, MY dreams, MY ambitions
But now finding myself in a different position

After I awoke, feeling disillusioned, and remembering all who come and go
Once again, my heart like a river, back to source, begins to flow
Off in the distance, I see the setting sun
And remember that in finding MY self again, I've truly won

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

Phoenix, this is enchanting and masterful. You hit the meter and the rhyme perfectly. This poem compels you to continue reading line after line. It tells such a wonderful story of decisions made and consequences....rediscovery of self and personal identity. Beautiful write. This one is going in my favorites. 100/100

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed! This was one of my first after a decade of poetic silence.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Well, you came out of that silence with a howl...It's beautiful..:)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Aw schucks! Thank you :-)

[Angels heart]

I a always love your poems because they tell a story. Great poem!

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you :-)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I'm astounded at your prolific writing rate. AND they're all good.
It's obvious you have a natural talent for writing.
I read these poems like chapters in a book.
You are growing, freeing yourself, becoming the person you always knew you were.
You SHOULD write a book.
Great poetry.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Aw, thank you for your kind words! I always appreciate your review :-D

[Saddam]

Amazing and Gajab story with those silent latters. Enjoy your piece dear..... Masterly write.

[FlamingPhoenix]

:-) Thanks!

[Bluefire]

It tells a story within the intricate layers of another, weaved together quite epically.
Well done!

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[Lyn Anderson]

I really love this poem, and the analogy of the boxes. What I would suggest though, if you read it aloud, the I'm and I've sound better as I am and I have, in my humble opinion. And as far as looks of the poem, I would lean towards writing out the 1, 2, 3 etc., but as always, poetic license is the rule!

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you. I'll give it a think.

[Lyn Anderson]

Not a problem. Just a suggestion.

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thanks :-)

[melissa]

Your welcome

[s y e]

The illusion has a tendency to disappoint at times. Sometimes it's better to get out while we still can and not feel that way. This was very good, FP.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thanks :-). One of my first after a decade of poetic silence.

[Listmaker]

The illusion sometimes disappoints. Glad you were able to break free and be yourself once again. A strong poem written by a strong person. Very good writing.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you so much for your kind words of encouragement!