Little Blue Bird

I was sent this picture and it inspired a poem. So here it is.

 

A little song bird sitting on the tree

I hear someone singing

And it isn’t me

I fly to find

 Who is singing along

A little blue bird is sitting on the tree

He is such a good singer

And so much prettier then me.

My feathers look so worn

And he looks so new                 

Will I become a blue bird?

Will I be beautiful too?

I land next to him

And he continues his song

Barely noticing me

But I knew that all along.

A little brown bird

Will never catch the eye

Of the little blue bird

As blue as the sky.

Author's Note

Here it is- tell me what you think.

Reviews

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

It's a little sad..but i lke it..i think that when the little brown bird makes the realization that the blue bird is in sense 'better' than him it is powerful..i like the way your words flow because it makes it easy to follow along with..i thin kits relatable as too...
Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

s~Shsanty~s

[QuillandInkWhispers]

Aww that's sad. the blue bird didn't even notice the little brown bird. They could've been such good friends. That was a great poem! Keep Writing.

[Rin]

It's very soft, kind of like the strange girl in the corner that is jealious of the popular people. It's is neat because normally the female birds are dull compared to the showy male birds. I like how you took nature and made it sybolize something else but keeping it realistic.

[Kelly D. Burris]

sad, but reminds me of how we humans can see ourselves as less than when we compare ourselves to others.
Nicely written.
Kelly

[Joseph - Michael]

This is kind of bit harsh in small way, because of the "self-esteem and such. Yet, there's a "comparing and competing" as well. But, it's all good here...

By the way, it reminded me of the old saying; "Now, I know why the caged birds sing" if you get my meanings?

[Tamme]

I really liked this. There is a wistful song like quality to it that makes it come alive.

[Requiem]

It makes me think that the little brown bird has somewhat of a self-esteem issue. I like the anthropomorphism you have in here. "Then" me thinks should be 'than'.

[ah]

great write, thanks for asking me to read... keep writing

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Mmm, wow. This is a fabulous poem. Wonderful write!!!

Heather

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

it was cute, and sad. It is much like humans, wanting to be something we are not.

[PhoeniX]

so sweet. it gave me a touch of home