Spiteful God

Why would you take the lives of three,

Just to create something faulty beyond repair?

Am I just sick entertainment in your circus?

Nothing more than a freak in a cage for your enjoyment,

I cannot hear you laughing but I know you smirk,

Beat me and tear open my skin,

I'm nothing more than rusty cogs.

I cannot escape it,

The guilt you make me feel for doubting you,

Your force tears from my eyes feeling the need to atone,

Why take the chance on me if I'm merely scrap,

Passed from another to another,

Just somebody else's problem,

When will I finally anger you to the point...

That I'll just be recycled. 

How is it I can feel hate to the person who created me,

Feel remorse for the man who gave me life,

I am the man locked away from existence,

While you would be the master who laughs at my pain,

Should I feel guilty or stronger than before,

For the God who looks over me is spiteful. 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats, dude. This is intense. Thanks for sharing it with us.

[Forgotten]

No problem! I'm glad you liked, thank you for your review :)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure...I liked it a lot.

[ROSALIND]

Interesting piece of work.... But I personally don't get it why people always blame GOD ..................

[Forgotten]

I guess it's just someone people think the can blame without consequence but don't worry I don't blame God for my problems, if I have any they are my own not because of him. Thank you for your review :)

[saratogaparty]

"When will I finally anger you to the point...
That I'll just be recycled. "

DAMN! this is good.

[saratogaparty]

It reminds me of that modest mouse song "Parting of the Sensory"

[Forgotten]

I have never heard of it, I shall have to check that out :)

[Susie]

this was gr8, is dis 4 sum1?

[Forgotten]

Thank you and yes, my girlfriend wanted me to do some writing because I hadn't done any for a while

[Susie]

Ah, dis is cool :D

[Lily Mae]

Very powerful..it's left me speechless while swimming in all that emotion. You penned it all so well.. I could feel it in my core.. That last stanza was amazing..xo

[Forgotten]

Thank you, I was quite fond of the last verse too, it just kind of brought it all to a central understanding, thank you for your review :)

[beautiful dreamer]

wow! wonderful

[Forgotten]

Haha thank you!

[Jazique]

I reccomend fixing the first verse but, overall that was good and really reflected what your title said as well the words themselves that carry so much emotion jumping from the paper. Anyway well done.

[Forgotten]

I agree, the first verse does need some fixing, thank you for your review :)

[Jazique]

You're welcome, thanks for sharing

[Frieda P]

Wow, this gave me chills. Some potent emotions going on in this one. 'He' has one twisted strange sense of humor, to say the least, this said it best. Bravo for writing this....

[Forgotten]

Haha yes, He has a very twisted sense of humour :P I'm glad you enjoyed it, always a pleasure :)

[Frieda P]

I can appreciate twisted ;-)

[Forgotten]

Haha twisted can be very interesting sometimes, depends how twisted we are talking about ;)

[Frieda P]

That's a whole other poem ;-P

[Forgotten]

Hahaha I love how mysterious you are ;) That probably keeps people on their toes

[Frieda P]

haha they just know I'm fom jersey that pretty much scares the bejaysus out of people right off Lol

[Forgotten]

Hahaha yeah I think I could understand that :P I'm from Stroud, and well if anyone has any common sense they stay well away from England especially with our economic climate ;) I don't think it's quite a scary as your place though :P

[Frieda P]

ha! that's what she said.....

[Susie]

I think you both live in nice places compared to me though....

[Forgotten]

Hahahaha touché :P