Dark Disease

You treat me like a parasite,

A blood sucking leech within my own abode,

You think you have the right to call me irresponsible?

Take the cancer ridden fumes from your mouth,

Then you can look down on me!

How dare you treat me like dirt,

When the vermin is crawling under your own flesh,

You want to treat me like I'm a lesser being?

Then so be it!

I'll let the disease argue my case in the future.

Look at your frail body,

Destroyed by your own stupidity,

Crushed because your will power is but naught!

Speaking to me with coarse verses?

Wipe the tar from your cracked lips first,

See that?

Your body is losing the battle,

I'm irresponsible you say?

Look at yourself before you say it to me,

I told you the science,

I told you the facts,

You didn't listen so look who's laughing now. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This felt like a purging of sorts...a beautiful purging. I find poetry that digs deep into the emotional wellspring the best kind. I feel your words and your images. I feel your depth and your clarity as if they were little pebbles I can hold in my hands. Well written and well shared.

[Forgotten]

Thank you, I like to make my anger clear as can be, make it easy to understand it :)

[quinfinn]

someone is really frustrated and angry with an obvious smoker. well, you can laugh at me now, for i smoke half a pack of cigarettes a day, even though i have lung cancer. i see the logic in this but am too addicted to quit. it is an insidious drug, this nicotine, and the tobacco companies strive to make it more addictive with chemicals....well penned angst!

[Forgotten]

Ah but the difference is Quinn you have a overflowing fountain of kindness which cancels out the other fact :) I'm sure you would at least listen to the facts but well this person refuses to listen and takes it out on me. Blames me for the stress. It is an addictive thing but I don't blame the addiction if the person underneath it has the kindness you do :)

[quinfinn]

very nice of you to say so, thank you.....some people just can't be nice....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A flowing vitriolic and passionate piece of eloquent free verse that is full of pathos. Great read!
Was not too sure about one line:
Look your frail body

[Forgotten]

Ah thank you you spotted a mistake! I shall fix that :) I glad you liked it John, always a pleasure

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is a lovely free verse J-P