Smiling at You!

I'm smiling at you!

Baring my teeth to bear the hour; the day; the minute; the life! 

I'm smiling at you!

It feels naturally unnatural after all these years; these tears; these fears.

I'm smiling at you!

Because I've seen through the shield you wield to yield them.

I'm smiling at you!
To strengthen an invisible tether, to float a feather, represent the weather.
Mostly, I'm smiling with you!
Your energy; your moxie; your gorgeous simplicity.

I'm smiling with you! 

Reviews

[Franky]

This is sweetly romantic and enticing. Well done. I can feel the emotion in this.

[Relic]

I like the poem, however, if I give you a slight critique, will you still smile? Or will you feed me to the wolfs, never again to write another word or say hello to the mailman?

[FractalLuna]

This comment made me smile!

[Relic]

Okay then, I take it It's okay. :)

I like repetition although I think the phrase "I'm smiling at you may be used a tad too much. Also: the lines "to float a feather, represent the weather," seems out of context to me.

I'm sure others will disagree and I hope they do, but anyway, the great oz has spoken. :D

[FractalLuna]

That's fair! Thanks for the critique!

[Relic]

No problem.

On a side note: I had to go to your page to make sure you didn't block me. haha