Love child

Love child

A Poem by Fran Marie

 

Blue-orange flames dance high in the fireplace
as old love letters burn the secrets known
locked away, hidden, our love a disgrace
concealed in darkness,of love sins there sown
fraught with forbidden fruit,angel's despair
who would forgive ? an ill-fated affair
bore a treasure fair, of love's secret kept
condemned lovers were we, who would forget?
A myriad questions, ev'ryone asked
avoiding sad -dark truths~ with vague replys
answers in written proof,now lie in ash
revealed in grey smoke, a love secret dies
 
Tho~ parted by distance,and time has flown
Our love child,our secret,shall ne'er be known
 

© 2008 Fran Marie


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Awesome opening imagery, with the flames doing double-duty -- both heightening & destroying feelings. Your message shows us many faces of such an illicit affair, but most of all, the need for secrecy, thus the opening & the ending are nicely tied together to hide all that's inside. Very interesting use of "love child" (a term I haven't heard in a couple decades!)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Thank you for entering my competition.

Your words really spoke to me. I could see the flames, the burning love letters and feel the sadness with each line.

I particularly liked:
our love a disgrace
concealed in darkness

There was just something beautiful in those carefully chosen words.



Posted 6 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

Thanks ElizaB for your review on my poetry.. i so appreciate it...
Awesome opening imagery, with the flames doing double-duty -- both heightening & destroying feelings. Your message shows us many faces of such an illicit affair, but most of all, the need for secrecy, thus the opening & the ending are nicely tied together to hide all that's inside. Very interesting use of "love child" (a term I haven't heard in a couple decades!)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely rhythm in the verse. Though its a sad poem but sounds really good

Posted 14 Years Ago


A beautiful poem. Those secrets of life twist up the mind forever.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is so beautiful and flows nicely through...i can picture the flames and feel the emotion

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful poem. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Are you a keeper of secrets?

Great poem....that's no secret though.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When you say, "Our love child,our secret,shall ne'er be known" it sounds like a child was conceived and born from the affair. Awesome poem with all of its description and poetic feel.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the poem .. i like the colors used and the images and telling of this story.. love child..

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You speak of this eloquently....and youve also stuck that Diana Ross and The Supremes song in my head...thats ok though...cause I like that song....*L*

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 25, 2008

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  Fran Marie
Fran Marie

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