Trace

Trace

A Poem by Fran Marie
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~Sonnet~

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         Softly you whisper sweet love words to me

           spinning my heartbeat to sublime pleasure

         tripping my senses to pure ecstacy

            tenderly you give this divine treasure

 

          Slowly you trace fingertips thru~my hair

             falling, I'm falling,yet again for you

          reeling,feeling, you are taking me there

             fluidly you sense love's fulfillment too

 

          Blissfully we do meld as soul mates one

             rising our spirits to soar the blue skies

          spending each compassion under the sun

             knowingly,a love such as ours ne'er dies

 

          Softly, I surrender my love to thee

              tenderly, pledging all eternity

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2010 Fran Marie


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This is even prettier than the last one ('your touch'). I love sonnets, and I never thought I would read a better one than Shakespeare's Sonnet XXVI (26), but you proved me wrong. I like this one. It shows lust at first, but then melts into love, and I like the transition. It's not trashy, or sleezy. It's sexy, but not in the sex way. Does that make sense? I mean to say that it has an air of sexy and sweet mixed with intensity and romance. I'm just impressed. Again. Good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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This such a beautifully exquisite work of art.
So very romantic. It takes my breath away.

Posted 6 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

thanks Ance, so very much;
I think the title fits this poem perfectly! Though don't like your opening line too much I do like the rest of the intro to the piece. the line that stood out most to me was "tripping my senses to pure ecstasy." I believe that one line defined the whole mood for this poem! well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very good you leave a whole lot to the reader's imagenation which is as it should be you "push the envelope" but do not tear it. I enjoyed the read!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Slowly you trace fingertips thru~my hair falling, I'm falling,yet again for you reeling,feeling, you are taking me there fluidly you sense love's fulfillment too....wow i wish i could write this~this is romantic,sexy and seductive I like it /all of it, beautiful

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

elegant and beautifully done.... the words melt off the page... great job on this..

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Completely and utterly beautiful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is absolutely beautiful, and, in every way!

You really have the skill and artistry to write in a sonnet form that just melts the heart with its words and lines.. ' .. spinning my heartbeat to sublime pleasure tripping my sences to pure ecstacy '

Yet another sincere thank you for sharing.



Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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