Hello Darlin'

 

I've known men like you before, but by some strange token
you were quite different than the rest,an instant turn on.

Maybe it was your sexy mustashe or the cool style you projected or perhaps
the way your cigarette smoke curled into those little o' rings above
your thin lips.

Suddenly I began to realize I was falling for you.

What was I thinking? Had I taken leave of my senses?
My thoughts became tangled.

I was going into that silly gaga stage knowing darn well you'd
bring tears to my eyes, if we started our on and off affair once again.

That rainy night you pulled into town in your red corvette everyone knew
within the hour that you were back in town.

I knew at midnight when my telephone rang, call it intuition or whatever,

but I just knew it was you 

I didn't want to answer the call to hear the tall tales you most likey had to
tell, liar that you are.

I knew you were down at the old 730 cafe down on
Main St. soakin' up the booze and kickin' back with blusey songs.

Getting wasted again, runnin' up your bar tab and playing Mr.big shot!

You are such a con,
I Know how you are,first night back in town you have to tie one on.

But I couldn't resist the temptation.

My nerves were shot as I twiddled my thumbs
and paced around like a silly school girl, full of excitement
I rushed over to the phone on the wall and on the tenth ring I picked it up and said,
Hello Darlin'....




 

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

I absolutely loved this. I think most people have a person like this in their life. One that no matter how hard they try, no matter what they have put you through or the situation you are in, you will always pick up that phone, always want to hear their voice. I really liked how you set this up too. It is a story, but it is composed a bit like poetry, and the language says poetry as well. Really beautiful work my friend.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ashira.,so very much appriciated

[Coyote Poetry]

Those woman who would say "Hello Darlin" were worth the return trip and possibilities of disappointment. I like the story and the ending. You create a interesting tale with your words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Magdelena]

Hello Darlin'.. Oh this is nice!!! You described what all of us go through when we feel those nerve endings going haywire. The thoughts rumbling through our head. The knowledge 'This is worng' yet we go for it.. Oh the sweet pleasure at that first moment of hearing that voice, the pins and needles it brings forth. What imagery in this. Short, sweet, and oh so powerful!!! Fantastic piece fran...


Mag xx

[cest la vie]

Hello Darlin- I love that phrase.. And you set the scene with such vivid detail. This is such a true write for so many of us women. How many times have we all said "Not gonna answer" only to answer. Very nice write!!

[WriterMe]

This was short, simple and very insightful in a way. Great write.

[Sean M. Addams]

very nice love all the detail you put into this made me feel like i was there... very enjoyable ... overall nice job on this...

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, i just love the story in this! You have done a wonderful job of setting the scene - in detail -, and then giving the old one two punch at the end! How often we do just this!!...and most often regret it! It must be a weakness in the heart of hearts that is labeled....ROOM FOR SUCKERS!...SMILES

GREAT WRITE, and nice format!!

[Rockebah]

I love this. I get that the narrator is torn between what her heart says and what her mind says.
I sometimes feel like that.
Brilliant write.

[deeps]

Such a wonderful and emotion filled write Fran
I like this...Kim Travis