Broken

So aggravated...

Another crush ruined 

by another girl 

that I barely know. 

I told a guy 

that I like him.

And I got the 

Same answer 

That I always 

get:

"I only like

you as a 

friend..."

I can't tell you 

how many times

I've heard that.

The girl he likes,

yeah, I guess 

she's alright.

But, I've heard 

That she's cheated on boyfriends......

I hope he's careful......

Reviews

[ThIsDaRkRoAdToNoWhErE]

This is such an awesome piece!! I can pretty much relate, cause my ex had cheated on me. I did everything for her, and i mean everything that i could do. And when i found out what she did, pft, God, just no words or emotions could describe what i felt. Ugh, and the guy she's with now...Ugh, omg...that's another story right there lol. But i totally felt this tho, it was great. Great job with it! :)

[Warrior]

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end. I feel the same way when I watched a movie or tv series that I get so attached to, I never want it to end. And for this writing, I didn't want it to end. You had me hooked, and I am sure everyone else who read it was hooked as well. That is good, that is what you want for people to keep wanting more. The way you put the story together makes me feel like my life is different for that moment in which I read your story. I love it, and it was beautiful. Just keep posting stories like this, and you'll have a good following.

[Lucien Maier]

the formatting is really well done. The words a well thought out, and exceptionally well placed.

[MoriartyMesa]

Part of me feels way old to read something like this, it draws the reader to a place of youth. And that is always an interesting effect.

[BLACK PRINCE]

nice poem that conveys those feelings
that we all had at some point of our life.
when you like somebody but they don't see you in the same way.

[Underestimated]

i hate when you like someone, and someone prettier than you gets the guy. so sad!
really good poem, really nice placement of the words. Your really awesome!!!

[Ragin Cajun]

Very good. I was a little confused about the structure. I did like the simplicity of it.

[Katrina Crago.]

Very Touching and True.
I loved it.

[Whiskurz]

I hate the friend word as well.....Great write.....Whisk

[AK]

Wow! Awesome poem! I totally love the flow and how you use simple words and yet make a poem so powerful. The ending was brilliant! Keep writing!