Dear You Piece of S**t

I know you’re here
I can feel your breath
My skin turns pale
I live in a body I detest
F**k this worthless bottle of pills
Sorry Mr. Doctor, you just can’t help
I can’t stay here anymore
I've been biting down hard
Keeping everything to myself
But my mind turns against me in the night
And the only voice I hear is His
He’s telling me I’m stupid
A dirty waste of space
It’s 4 in the morning and I’m shaking in place
Reading these lines as they’re written
It seems I’m not me
My words aren't my own
And I’m a reflection of what He made of me
I can’t fix this
I can’t go back
Your hands feel rough on my skin
Sliding down my thighs
You rip me close
And drag me to my demise
Hands and legs are flying
I can’t change a thing
It’s far too late
And I can’t forget
How you killed me back in 2008

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"My words aren't my own
And I’m a reflection of what He made of me "
The poem touched on bad memories and places. Something cannot be erased. Sometime releases to paper. Maybe you save another. Thank you for sharing the powerful poetry.
Coyote

[LauraraMonique]

Oh my gosh, reading this gave me the chills, in A GOOD WAY. Awesome job, especially this portion:

"I know you’re here
I can feel your breath
My skin turns pale
I live in a body I detest
F**k this worthless bottle of pills
Sorry Mr. Doctor, you just can’t help "

I would love to see more of your work. You have an awesome unique style. And I really love that you have a voice. You don't try to blend in like other writers. You keep up the great work, I'll be checking back!

Best,

Laurara Monique
http://laura.productions/

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you so much, I appreciate your words more than you can imagine.

[Cambion]

This a powerful brew here. I can certainly sympathize with what the 4AM hour does to a captive mind. Gripping stuff, thanks for the read.

[Roger Turgeon]

A truly sad write, even more so because it is apparently true. Someone just said to me the only way to find the past is to move forward. I hope you can move forward enough to find the "you" that existed before this event.

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you so much

[Cahjli Symes]

wow.
this is very intense in a powerful way. I'm very sorry for what you had to go through...the way you put it brought a very intense and horrific imagery but that's a good thing to be blunt that way the point becomes much deeper in retrospect

[Gabby Nieves]

This was scary to write and even more scary to put on here. But thank you , I'm glad at least i wrote it in a way that got how strongly i feel

[Cahjli Symes]

Writing is always a good medium to let out all your fears and doubts in your mind in terms of past and present experiences. Most resort towards anger,self hatred or regret. You at least accepted what happened however not forgibe and it shows in your piece so its a good thing to transfer all these dark hidden emotions and thoughts into something artistic

[SquinklaPsyOps]

You have given "new life" a whole new meaning! If a mobster can find Christ and reform, it is true that anyone can.

[Gabby Nieves]

You're right, and that proves it very well haha. Thank you

[Leslie Philibert]

a sad, personal, maybe revenge poem that impresses with honesty...well written, impressive..

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you for the review, I appreciate it

[A. Amos]

Sorry for what happen and the pain you been through...you're such an amazing writer, this was not straight forward or easy write. You truly did a marvelous job...respect!

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you, it means a lot

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome...

[melissa]

Something like this happened to me too when I was 10, two of my uncles both did it so I understand.
Keep up the great writing.

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you and I'm sorry that you had to go through that, I hope you're okay. No matter how much time goes by I feel you never forget. Stay strong always

[melissa]

You're welcome thank you you stay strong also

[Violet Stone]

Wow! Stunning! I love every second of this! :D It was easy to read and very enjoyable. Keep up the great work Gabby, and I hope all is well :)

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you c:

[Violet Stone]

You're welcome :)