Brown Eyes

For anyone with lovely brown eyes.

Doe-eyed, those cinnamon eyes

Shine the loveliest!

Eyes like nutmeg, I do see.

Eyes sweeter than chocolate,

Warmer than coffee,

Stronger than mahogany.

Author's Note

This is an inverse of a haiku.

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

I was lured to this poem because I, too, wrote a poem called Brown Eyes, and I was happy to see your Author's Note saying it's an inverse haiku. I love that! Take a form, and add your own spin on it! I just did something like that with a Blitz poem. :)

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you!

[AliciaB]

This is beautiful! It reminds me of my sister's eyes - they are deep and strong and beautiful, just as you describe in this poem. :) I like the various analogies you use, such as spices/chocolate/coffee and being "stronger than mahogany." Sometimes people think that brown eyes are plain or boring, but in reality, they are rich, intricate, and amazing. You have captured that beautifully with this unique poem. Way to go!

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you! That's a good point.

[Sonia Walker]

Such a descriptive poem on eyes. The last line, "stronger than mahogany," clinches the theme of this poem. Most of the people I have met who have brown eyes seem to have strong personalities or certain qualities which makes them stand above the crowd. ~ Sonia

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much for your thoughts! I appreciate it!

[Black Cat Fever]

A captivating and enthralling poem. Lovely eyes. You can just drown in them!

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you very much!

[Black Cat Fever]

You're welcome.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Its all in the eyes. A beautiful poem.
This work is a pleasure to read

[GalaxyGhost]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

[Gee]

Ooh, ooh, it's me, it's me, yeahhhhhhhhh

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much!

[Flower]

Well, I certainly feel more appreciated for the commonly-shared colour of my eyeballs. The "my" in the first line confuses me; is this a piece directed at yourself? The "I believe" also indicates one's personal opinion rather than a strong truth or widely shared value hence lowering the value of the message. I like the overall message though--brown-eyed people are just as lovely and striking as light eyed individuals :)

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you! I'll edit my poem.

[Shannon]

A nice set of comparisons, so many ideas.

[GalaxyGhost]

Thanks! I appreciate it!