Sarah

i'M SO TIRED.

AND GLOW, BEAUTY!

You are the star that out shines them!

Blind them with your radience

And smile like I did when you looked at me and I looked at you

looking at me

looking at you

looking at me

looking at you look away and never look back.

But when I catch that eye, a piece of me dies inside

and I remember why I tried to stay away so bad.

It wasn't me in that shell, I swear!

I missed you so much being trapped in there-

THAT CARELESS MONSTER I BECAME

That monster wasn't me, though we shared a face

But that's not me anymore, I swear to you this

I've taken back control and what I've noticed is

I've burned far too many bridges and I want yours to be the first built

I get it if you're against this, I imagine the hate for me has you filled

I'm sick of me,

But I'm sick of you, being sick of me

And I'm sick of you thinking s**t of me

I don't blame you, not a single bit,

I'm just sick of it, see?

I'm sorry I was an a*****e and I'm sorry lied

about cheating and decieving and leaving your side

I'm sorry I hurt you,

I'm sorry I can't change what I did

I'm sorry I treated you like dirt

and I'm sorry that I exist.

I'd really like to be friends.
I miss talking to you.

The only place I do is when

I'm dreaming of a saltwater room

That's not part of the poem, that's just incase you read this

I thought I'd throw it in, but I doubt you'll even see this.

 

 

Author's Note

I don't really care what you think of this piece. I like it entirely.

Reviews

[LaVonneTheLovely]

This was almost lyrical! I really love it.

Favorite Lines?
I'm sick of me,

But I'm sick of you, being sick of me

And I'm sick of you thinking s**t of me

I don't blame you, not a single bit,

AND

It wasn't me in that shell, I swear!

I missed you so much being trapped in there-

THAT CARELESS MONSTER I BECAME

That monster wasn't me, though we shared a face

(the first little excerpt I really loved because of the flow of it, the rhythm and the second just because I can really personally relate to that part of the poem in my own way)

I think this one is going in my favorites library! great job and good luck building a bridge back to this girl!

[A Poet Named Garit]

thank you so much! it's on my agenda believe me!

[LaVonneTheLovely]

:) wonderful. and you are very welcome.

[s y e]

This was great, I think you have written it really well. (: If you're happy with it then it's a bonus, right? Not every writes likes their writes but I'm glad you do 'cause this one was great.

~ Noodle.

[A Poet Named Garit]

thanks ramen :)

[s y e]

Ramen? Ha.

Pleasure

[Alone In A Crowd]

I like it, but I think you missed a word out now and there, but very lyrical. Well done.

[End.]

I like how the poem became self-aware at the end. nice write.

[James Wells]

It had a melodious quality about it. I enjoyed the bit at the end, I thought that flowed rather nicely.

[Sarah Khalil]

Well seeing as it's addressed to me :P, does my opinion matter? Good - 'cause I like it! :) Thanks for sharing!

[A Poet Named Garit]

Good! I'm so glad sarah, I wrote this hopign you'd see it :] hahahaha!

[Another Poet]

Cool poem, very good :)

[Chas. R. Lionheart]

Wow. This is a really good piece. The raw emotion you showed really puts me in the author's perspective.

[A Poet Named Garit]

thank you chas!

[K.S.78]

I really liked this because it felt raw, and unbridled and that's how spoken word is supposed to sound; Like you don't give a s**t. In spoken word your use of grammar and punctuation dont matter as much but your vocabulary does and that becomes hard when you write with this much passion. I very much enjoyed this piece though, great write!

[A Poet Named Garit]

thank you! i feel like grammar and punctuation and like all the rules of literature take the fun out of writing so i tried to just type and that's it. i feel like it adds voice so i'm really glad you picked up on that! thank you very much KS!