Lie with me

[Verse 1]
I don't see redemption in suffering
I don't see redemption at all
And my arms weigh a ton
After hoisting the sun
And I can't help but let the night fall

[Verse 2]
But you'll see, if you give it some pondering
That we're of the fortunate few
Who have danced on the stars
And been smothered in scars
And there's no other story so epic and true

[Chorus]
So, goodnight now
No goodbyes
In the gathering dusk you'll hear one of my lullabies
The dark may be long
But we still have this song
And I'll sing it 'til every tear dries
Time to lie down
Close our eyes
Acknowledge the black but refuse it to paralyze
Then tomorrow we'll stand
And uniting our hands
We can lift the sun back to the skies

[Verse 3]
For now I'll accept that we're faltering
I'm tired, discouraged and sore
And I know you are, too
But I'm thinking of you
And a life that could be so much more

[Verse 4]
So I hope you'll assert your autonomy
Seizing control of your time
'Cause I know once you've freed yourself
You might concede yourself
Wanting that lonely heart beating with mine

[Chorus]
So, goodnight now
No goodbyes
In the gathering dusk you'll hear one of my lullabies
The dark may be long
But we still have this song
And I'll sing it 'til every tear dries
Time to lie down
Close our eyes
Acknowledge the black but refuse it to paralyze
A new day can come
If we will it as one
So, goodnight now, goodnight, no goodbyes

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wow!!! This is brilliant!! So perfect!! WOW!!
Now that I've read these awesome lyrics, I'm dying to hear it along with the music. It's will simply rock!!
You must put a lot of thinking into it. Well, it shows. It's really hard to craft a song that well. No need to mention it, but I really like the chorus!!
TERRIFIC!! FANTASTIC!!

[paperdaydreams]

This is really good, i'd love to hear it along with music! i particularly like the ine about hoisting the sun but not being able to help let the night fall, great work :)

[Deepshikha]

Your imagery is beautiful...though you probably didn't intend it this way, I kinda sung it in my head in a minor tone, in a softer, more acoustic Nighwish-like feel. That's a plus, if a reader can just insert lyrics into a tune.
I love the concede of defeat, but acceptance of the future message especially. No critical reviews from me, since I just adore this.