Tears of a Frozen Paradise

Tears of a Frozen Paradise

A Poem by Onatah

Watch them, fear them, never touch them;
The screaming crystals reaching backwards
The timeless rivers flow anointed.
Confused, misguided, helpless believers;
Chasing never ending gospels.
And while time yields not a strict obedience
Till that crimson flower blossoms
And the horizon paints a living fire.

 

© 2011 Onatah


Author's Note

Onatah
Icicles, and how they are demons.

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You cradle the reader in passion, and I'm particularly drawn to the multiple connotations... I say, it's quite amazing that such power can merge from so few words...

'Till that crimson flower blooms
And the horizon paints a living fire'

I see so much more than icicles, whether or not deliberate, your tapestry is selective and a brilliant means of conveying fire and ice in its most symbolic form...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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this good =] well done very powerful for such a small write =P well done =D

Posted 14 Years Ago


nice, besides a mispelling here and there, did not detract from the powerful statement. a mindeset in mythology/reality, a scope of belief, awsome job

Posted 14 Years Ago


I agree with ZeN on this one.
Vividly fantastic.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are a talented writer. Power in every sentence. Like a Dante's story. Every word had a purpose. A excellent short poem.
Coyote


Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Almost quite like a metaphoric description of mind altering substances. Or that is just my imagination running away with me. Splendid read. Hope to encounter more of your writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fantastic in its elusive and ambiguous description.. your very creative in the narrative and potent in your stabs at word pictures.. I liked it much..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem!
I love the imagery.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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