I Just Want to Be There

I Just Want to Be There

A Poem by Miiki

They promised me...
I would be there to meet my new uncle
I would be there for their wedding
I would be there to be their flower girl
I wanted to be there...
To soothe my aunt after the divorce
To congratulate her on her new marriage
To be the bride's maid
I wish I was there...
To see my cousin's first day in life
To carry him in my arms
To be his older sister
I am irritated...
That I can't be there to see my cousin grow
To see my family expand
To be a member of the family
I just want to be there

© 2012 Miiki


Author's Note

Miiki
I have family who I barely ever get to see who live in a different continent. I feel like I'm never there with them unless I see pictures or talk to them on the phone. But I'm not really there, I'm just listening to what happened.
Thanks for reading! I hope you liked it :)

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I like this... the emotion pops out at me and I like that... i can see the anger and pain... lovely job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
Japanese Cherry

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome
Hey, my family's at war with each other. it can always get better.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind and I hope things are okay between you and your family :)
I like the colours and I can see the anger and frustration coming through. It's nice to read a poem that's about an issue of feeling separate from everyone else. Oh maybe you could add how far away you are?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

I like that idea! I'll try to fit it in, thanks!
Persona

7 Years Ago

You're welcome George.
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SJ
Totally relate to the poem bud! While absence does make the heart grow fonder & fun things of the sort, it really sucks when family is so far away and you don't get to experience all the crucial moments with them. It's succinct, to the point and filled with heart and soul. Awesomely done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
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Dez
i really like it! i feel like i'm goign through he/r life! nice add of color

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
George, you have written a remarkable poem. Before I read the "Author's note" I understood it to be written by someone who was dying or who had just passed on, and was feeling badly that his/her demise came sooner than expected. But physical separation is painful for the living. I think your poem has wonderful substance and heart. Write on!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
This is sad. I'm lucky to be so close with my family. :( You conveyed the emotion very well. good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
I understand personally message me if u wanna tlk.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thanks :) I'll be sure to message you, but I think I'm alright for now.

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Miiki

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