Black dust

I was just remembering how this skin
Bandaged once nothing but black dust.
All it contained
Sometimes lying on the harsh kitchen floor
I tried

Nothing petty; nothing dainty
My most honest apologies: I'm not flowery this time
Just layers of black swirled fog
Under the bathroom sink
I tried

The shiny, compact, mirrored top
Black fog would roll down my cheeks
It grew and it grew and it grew. My sleep informed me
On capacious carpet that looked like blended arguments and meaningless
I tried

I hurled up dust at every kiss
So rain, you better hammer the ground.
Wind: shatter my windows.
Thick, grey, mighty clouds: suffocate the entire world
Because I know
I almost died

Author's Note

Please let me know if my poetry is powerful. Thank you x

Reviews

[Don't just B, but B ama..]

The emotions are intense, a bit hard(for me) to comprehend where you were going with this, until that last stanza. powerful, indeed it is, and a tough spirit in the face of misery and hard times. Love it, you may like my "Dying every Second" poem. This piece was great and well written, a tad tough to pull the meaning from, but it challenges the reader to put their thinking cap on, and re-read. Well done.

[Georgiana]

Thank you very much, it's lovely to hear the effects of my poem. I shall have a read of yours soon

[misha]

Such a powerful write. Great job!

[Georgiana]

Thank you! I appreciate it.

[Cryingkate]

Without reading your comment on a review I couldn't grasp exactly what You meant , but I did catch the emotional struggle.
The Inner Fight and struggle.
I also saw your strength.
Even though you seem to show how many ways you appeared broken you still pushed on and kept trying.
Then in the end you defied the laws to break you. You stood your ground and told the wind it better smash your windows and the rain to hammer the ground. Come with it's full strength cause you are going to fight till your last breath though suffocating.
You know if you don't fight it could kill you, cause it almost did.
You are prepared to battle to win.

Very very strong and Positive and full of light hiding behind the clouds of grey smoke.
You are your own force and the laws of nature had better take warning that you are no weak or trodden down Soul. You are a Seasoned Warrior.

Well that's' what I saw... and I walk away from it with more courage and strength.
Very nice Job !

[Georgiana]

Oh wow thank you so much for this review! It really does mean an awful lot to me that you seem to entirely understand my intended change of theme for the last stanza and are able to identify the positivity as well as the emotional struggle. I'm also incredibly pleased that my poem actually had an affect on you! I'm very grateful for your review; you've made me glow!

[Cryingkate]

I'm so happy I caught it. Thanks for letting me know.
I am horrible at reviews but I do try with all my heart to do the best I can.
I really do get inspiration from it. I Thank You :-)

[Georgiana]

Well this is by far my favourite review I have received so far (although I know that's not saying much as I haven't had that many reviews yet)! But I do find it a powerful and very helpful review :)

[ANM]

Yes this is hard hitting your use of words is good well done! It sums up illness that eventually kills I think?

[Georgiana]

Thank you! To me, it's about the effects of heavy emotional abuse which grinds one right down. But I am very pleased that you are able to interpret it in a different way. Thanks again for taking the time to read and review.

[ANM]

You are welcome!