Three lovers wrought

Three lovers wrought

A Poem by Gideon X. A. Elson
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I tried to write a villanelle. When two love each other and one loves another things set in motion that leave lovers asunder.

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The change of seasons has winter brought,
Begin this day with mornings chill,
With deepest passion two lovers wrought,

With eyes as blue as forget-me-not,
One lover here has had their fill,
The change of seasons has winter brought,

One love smells of sweet apricot,
You may eat until you've had your fill,
With deepest passion two lovers wrought,

For one can be blind to a lovers plot,
When one lovers yearnings are against thy will,
The change of seasons has winter brought,

For sake of love one lover has fought,
For sake of love one lover stays still,
With deepest passion two lovers wrought,

One lover dead and now forgot,
One lovers blood now left to spill,
The change of seasons has winter brought,
With deepest passion two lovers wrought.

© 2022 Gideon X. A. Elson


Author's Note

Gideon X. A. Elson
First ever attempt at a villanelle. Please let me know if I've made some mistakes in the structure.

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I enjoyed this Villanelle and would be interested to try this form. Thank you for sharing this poem and also the valuable tip in the review below.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gideon X. A. Elson

1 Year Ago

No problem! Thanks for visiting!
With eyes as blue as forget-me-not,
One lover here has had their fill,
The change of seasons has winter brought,

Love these lines, this is one awesome "Villanelle"
the form intrigues me, I have tried and tried to write one, but can't focus on it for too long.
This is amazing

Posted 1 Year Ago


Gideon X. A. Elson

1 Year Ago

Best tip I can give is since you know you're only going to have two different rhymes don't limit you.. read more
Tragic ending to a love triangle. Lovely lyrical flow and rhyme. Never tried one of these. I admire your effort here.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely executed, Sir! This poet is applauding. The rhyme flies like the lyrics of a song. The theme is classic. Shakespeare would love it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Gideon X. A. Elson

1 Year Ago

I appreciate that! I was experimenting with a new format I'd never used, and I admit I enjoyed it! D.. read more
M. J. Smith

1 Year Ago

Dylan Thomas wrote one if the most famous villanelles: Do Not Go Gently Into That Good Night. Again,.. read more

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Added on January 8, 2022
Last Updated on January 12, 2022
Tags: Love, death, betrayal, deceit, cold, blood

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Gideon X. A. Elson
Gideon X. A. Elson

Keytesville, MO



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I'm nobody important, but I do find life more bearable when I create things be it writing poetry, music, photography or rambling nonsense. I like to write in rhyme and meter, though must admit emphasi.. more..

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