Undeniable Feeling

Slowly my heart falls
With each passing day
Knowing you’re gone
For the rest of my life
Kills me.
Deep down I know
That you were never mine
But the hope is still there
Burning bright within my soul.
I catch a glimpse of you
Our eyes meet,
But you look away
As if you didn’t see me
And my heart cracks a little once again.
I take a deep breath
Hold it in as you pass me
Our skin slightly brushes
And the tears fill my eyes.
I miss you.

Reviews

[InsanityWriter]

So sad. :( I could really feel the emotions. Lovely poem. :)

[Kenzi Griffin]

Thank you ^.^ I'm very self conscious about my own work so it feels great to get reviews like yours.

[Backlight Burner]

This is so easy to relate to, you show your emotions so well in this poem. It gives me something to remember and reminds me just how unfair life can be sometimes... Great write!

[Icelanna]

Very heart felt. I like this, it makes me want to hug someone! Very emotive which is important in first person writing. I would add some caesuras to create more emotion with small pauses etc to make if even more emotive, that the writer is pausing and thinking about what they are saying.