baby brain

it's just, a baby brain is better than a mature one...

Author's Note

white one's are poem and green is for fun!
please comment and some thoughts about it...
hope you enjoyed!

Reviews

[N.A.]

It's energetic, spontaneous, like youth should be. It conveys this unwillingness to acknowledge ugliness.
Is the silly rhymes there to distract or to confess? I don't know. Besides all that it is funny. I liked the last two lines
Good job

[Laminators Dubai]

its a confession...and thanks!
glad its funny...

[N.A.]

haha thanks for clarifying!

[Laminators Dubai]

if a poem is hard to understand...than its really bad for a poet or writer...

[The dark story]

first thing first, i like the way you have presented this piece, the last line absolutely goes with the background. nice theme.thats what special about having a kid's mind, always remember the happy ecstatic moment.

[Laminators Dubai]

glad you like it....

[Astro]

This is a topic that I myself have explored and thought wouldn't it be nice to go back to being ignorant of things that make us unhappy, but for me, this isn't the answer for nothing would then ever get changed and things would stay the same. Thought provoking write though Glitch.

[Laminators Dubai]

thank you astro!
i guess...

[Astro]

Glitch, you will come to understand that when I review someones work I am honest in my personal opinions toward it. This may be flattering for some and disparaging for others, but my intentions are always objective going in. I would hope that an artist would be open to criticism and take from it and become stronger, or discount it and move on. I have no doubt that you have something valusble to share but writing is an art and all art must be practiced before being mastered. I too practice it everyday and will not pretend to be better than anyone else, but instead, I am happy when someone feels my work is noteworthy.

[Laminators Dubai]

you are right...
i do practice everyday....
even i baind paper by my own had to make a little notebooks...
i will show you my practice writing...
maybe you can help...

[Laminators Dubai]

im happy to know you...
i always get the best of people...

[Astro]

Well feel free to send me your work anytime, I will do my best to help when I can.

[Laminators Dubai]

thank i know..
you got a big heart like the astro in the movie...
wish you dont have that kind of jet packs too.....lol

[Astro]

Doomo arigato gosaimasu!! Anatanowa tomodachi arimasu.

[Laminators Dubai]

what does that means?

[Astro]

Well if my Japanese isn't too rusty, I was saying thank you very much and you are a friend. I thought if you were a fan of Astroboy, that you might be Japanese. My bad if you are not. :o

[Laminators Dubai]

im indian..

[Astro]

Well I can't speak Punjabi or Hindu so I'll stick to just saying Thank you. ;)

[Laminators Dubai]

even i cant speak punjabi...
but my dad can...
you got so much knowledge about language... why?

[Astro]

I've always been interested in communication, and the best way is to learn different ways to express yourself, that includes learning other languages. I also live in a very multicultural part of the world.

[Laminators Dubai]

where?!.....

[Astro]

Vancouver British Columbia Canada

[Laminators Dubai]

oooh...
i get it why this punjabi and all that...
how about indian food?

[Astro]

I like it, especially butter chicken and rice. Mmmm

[Laminators Dubai]

my whole family love that dish...
i live with my mum and dad and a big bro....
you?

[Astro]

I live with family too

[Laminators Dubai]

tell me about them.......i f you want to........

[Astro]

Perhaps another time in another place. Talk to you later. :)

[Laminators Dubai]

that was i nice talking to you astro.....
have a bouncy happy day!

[Tim Piotrowicz]

My thoughts are that this is an awesome poem. I know exactly what this is about and I can appreciate it. It is simple and short and sweet, but so deep. Keep writing, glitch.

[Laminators Dubai]

thank you timm!

[Sean_Norman]

I always enjoy your work! It sucks as we grow up that we lose our innocence through our different experiences. But good message and keep writing.

[Laminators Dubai]

thank you norman!!!
is this your real name?
if it is than i like it!
there is a movie paranorman...
ever seen?

[Sean_Norman]

Its Sean Norman but yea I have seen it I have a little Niece and Nephew!

[Laminators Dubai]

cool...
im always in study so i couldnt make to the climax thow...

[Laminators Dubai]

whats you fav movie?
mine is wall-e

[Great Aunt Astri]

YUP! You are right, we lose innocence as we grow up. Love your short (Zen-ish) poem. But Glitch, you have got a nice surprise in store for you, When you get to my age, your baby brain comes back!

[Laminators Dubai]

so how old are you?

[Great Aunt Astri]

Old enough to be your Aunt, I suspect! Keep writing

[4$H]

I just love your aesthetic sense :P
Also, the message conveyed is brilliant!

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks XOXOXOXOXOXOXO

[4$H]

Dunno why, but I am picturing you as a bundle of joy. Perpetually happy :P

[Laminators Dubai]

well
my happy so anything can come up!

[4$H]

xD From Delhi right?

[Laminators Dubai]

yuppppppppppppppppp

[Laminators Dubai]

paschim vihar

[Laminators Dubai]

you can catch me on fb if you wanted to
its glitch vow

[4$H]

Done :D You can check out my page for writers: https://www.facebook.com/ThoughtsOfTheQuill

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Cute. This simply reveals that a baby mind is an innocent one while the mature mind is a corrupted one. LOL. No offense for the others. What I mean is having an innocent mind makes you free from more sins...while having a mature mind makes you more capable of doing mistakes. The more intelligent you are, the more capable you are of making sins and get out of it. Anyway, in every rule there is an exemption. So I hope, I won't offend anybody here. I just explain what the poem means.
I like your concept.

[Laminators Dubai]

thats enough for me...
but you get what i am tring to tell