Wish Me Away

Wanting to be where she was

On the whispering of repeated hopes
my desire has found itself adrift;
floating abandoned of direction
mid a dark salted with stars.

The foundation of my drive
was washed away in a flood
of my own failings, foolishly
I never stopped looking up.

Much too hopeful to see ground,
I roamed every starry night.
Hanging kaleidoscopic dreams
from every still star I found.

The crippling silence of lights, teaches
the breath of night secures no promises.
Winged feet learned to walk on ground,
and my traveling spirit found home.

A parting Sun speaks to me still;
night and those stars, call to me.
May one among them soothe this brooding soul,
and wish me away, back into her arms.

Author's Note

This wrote itself, one of those very late nights I was having. Thank you for reading.

Captcha: dreamlet (no kidding) lol

Reviews

[Carissa Faulk]

Beautiful. I love the concept of the stars wishing.
Only suggestion is that I believe the first "to" in line 9 ought to be "too", as in too much, not going to somewhere. "Much too hopeful to see ground", I believe it should probably read.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. You are correct, thanks for catching the typo.

[Carissa Faulk]

No problem :) Really beautiful though, great work!

[Frieda P]

'Hanging kaleidoscopic dreams'...love that Travis, this one shines as it speaks volumes to your mind's desires, hopes and dreams, a brooding soul with so much spirit still.

Tripped a wee bit over 'mid a dark salted with stars' dark being an adjective I was a little bit lost, other than that I love this one....dark sky perhaps.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Frieda I'm glad it spoke to you in such a way. Your wonderful review has left me with a smile.

My insomnia took creative license with that line... I thought it was a bit abstract so I left it in. I'll think of some alternatives to make it clearer.

[Frieda P]

You're allowed creative license, we all do it on occasion, and I so get the insomnia, I loved it even in it's abstraction ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks Frieda. ;)

[Frieda P]

Can't go wrong with kaleidoscopic dreams ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

Beautiful poem, heartfelt sentiments. The ending was my favorite...:).................

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, friend I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

I did. You are welcome...:)..................

[Pryde Foltz]

A parting Sun speaks to me still;
night and those stars, call to me.
May one among them soothe this brooding soul,
and wish me away, back into her arms.

I see another child of captcha. But unto the poem what a wonderful literary piece. You have not held back in your expression and yet the words fit effortlessly together. Bravo.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yea, the captcha freaked me out on this one. Thank you so much, your thoughts are always received with great respect and appreciation.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Such a beautiful poem full of grace heart and soul.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much for those wonderful thoughts on this piece, bro.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

It is my pleasure.