Simply Said

How ill doth he say

with words of great pain

all that is left is unholy

this path has been chosen

bricks put in place

set down in concrete

do not ask what you think

it is our money spent

as our backs do the labor

no words from you

no thoughts on our behavior

do not hold back, let it all out

or how will we hear what you say

no is simply said my friend

so is yes if we may    

maybe you will think twice

before keeping words away

Reviews

[SarahV]

Nice poem really like the combination of words. To make it even more effective possibley add punctuation to make the text more rich and expressive! Over all nice, keep up the good work! :D

[Holly Mason]

thank you for review and constructive comments love it

[SarahV]

No problem happy to help! :D