My Dear Night

My Dear Night

Oh how I love to hate you

 and how you love to torture me 

force me to think and rethink

making me choke on my own screams 

the ones that will never leave

never taste your ugly face.

Oh my dear Night you are quite a sight.

You bring the loneliness

 or does the sun take my happiness

I will never know for you will never leave 

and this relationship

this friendship 

will never change

 Thanks for reminding me of just how lonely I really am

but oh, my dear Night, how faithful you are to me.

The best I've ever seen.

Reviews

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sounds like the night owl cursing the darkness for keeping it awake, taunting it with sad thoughts, while thanking it for always being there when it is needed... i was always a night owl and i still battle it for sleep, but i think i am slowly winning the war...i enjoyed this

[Ella]

Thank you for your interpretation i really enjoy reading them. I hope you do win! I'm so glad you enjoyed it

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yes, it's really good writing and such a relatable topic...you are welcome

[Andrew Rayne]

I was searching for a prose that I truly enjoyed, and I will say that this is probably my favorite you have written so far. It is an simplistic and elegant piece with perfect flow. There is all the underlining currents of every different reason why you are surrounded by this darkness. I say elegant, but I it is a beautiful tragedy that you could befriend a darkness out to torment you no matter how faithful they are. That must have been one hell of a heartbreak you had.

However, you have turned this tragedy of sorts into a wonderfully written work of prose. They you ended it was splendid and powerful. The kind of line that makes people remember you as a poet. I also enjoyed how you etched into the words, a kind of personification that has taken on a life of its own. This is done all the time, but it was rather how you let us almost see it. There's a connection, a relationship, friendship, regardless of the emotions set behind it there's something more than just the normal: "I hate the night sky."

One critique I will say, for I try to come up with at least one, is that it was a very fast read. I understand it was short, so I wasn't expecting it to be time consuming. However, some of your lines are lost and their power is abashed slightly because, we skip right through them. Placing comas where possible pauses or breaths if you will occur would make this piece stand out even more so than it does. Again, wonderfully written, look forward to hearing from you again and reading more.

[Ella]

Thank you for your amazing review! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed my piece and even more so to hear it was one of your favorites. It brings a smile to my face. It means a lot to me that it left an impact on you.

I still consider myself a beginner in poetry so i appreciate any advice given to me. I will definitely try and use your advice in my future writings. I also hope to hear from you soon. Feel free to send me a reading request! I will happily accept and review your writing. Thank you.

[Sue]

Nicely written! I've always enjoyed the night sky, but sitting there watching the stars, you begin to think and reflect on your life. It's a subtle reminder of what your life is and what relationships truly exist. Very beautiful poem!

[Ella]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you can relate to it.