When It Mattered

Oh so long ago, my heart and mind were one.

I once painted  a picture
With a s****y watercolor set
Of large beautiful trees
Rooted in sad gray clouds
Against a blue sky with purple stars
I was proud of it
I thought it was imaginary




Now I am stuck on a tree branch
stretching farther from earth and
closer to the clouds
It is cold up here
And lonely
There are no stars
To guide me home into your arms.

Reviews

[The Viking]

You know, most people would be put off by the word "s****y" in this poem, and I'll admit it kind of makes one focus, but I actually think it works - it gives this the proper voice of a bitter adult looking back on something warm and bittersweet in childhood, she's remembering an emotion that she rarely feels now, if ever. The huge gap between stanzas actually carries a strong symbolism, whether it was intended or not. It creates a gap that separates the innocent past from the bitter, unclear present. The imagery of the water color and how it became the dark world the narrator's in now is superb. The only question left is, who's arms is she wishing to be guided into? It's always up to the author, but I think this poem would be just as effective if not more if it ended on "To guide me home." Just my thoughts, and I overall liked this quite a bit.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The more we are disappointed in life the farther our heart and mind becomes in looking at life. An interesting way of expressing that feeling... very creative.