Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; dark clouds gather.
A grey tumbling sky; shoulders splatter.
Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
On Manhattan sidewalks and mirrored streets.
The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak, could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
Whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
Near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories and swim away
From the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, oh, I feel, that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.

© 2019 Relic


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hmm, a flood of wordplay and imagery. that's one clever fish. good stuff. remember to swim with the current ... :)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


 Relic

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Pete.
So wonderful poem my dear friend. A gran story in the poetry.
"So I'll mop up memories and swim away
From the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday."
The above lines. The statement, I could write a epic tale from. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


 Relic

1 Month Ago

Thanks for your great review, Coyote.
Coyote Poetry

4 Weeks Ago

You are welcome my friend.
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Rye
This is so good, very powerful.
I love the rhyme scheme and the flow.
Very nicely written and very creative.
love the pic.

Posted 1 Month Ago


 Relic

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Rye. :)
Rye

1 Month Ago

not a problem
great rhyming & rhythm. wonderful individual story lines.
"Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks" i love it. 👍

Posted 2 Months Ago


 Relic

2 Months Ago

Thanks very much, Carola.
Delightful - both the poem and the wonderful graphic. I felt like I was walking through the city in the rain. Great imagery!

Posted 2 Months Ago


 Relic

2 Months Ago

Thanks very much, Catherine.
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ANB
I love this one. You created such an interesting, surreal world and a feeling of being in a city but slightly off pace and out of touch, very relatable. And of course, the image is beautiful and perfect for this piece. I feel almost honoured by your kind words on my attempt at poetry now that I see your writing :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


 Relic

5 Months Ago

That's very kind of you to say. You're very talented. Thank you for the review.
Do you know Relic, all that screams at me is "Dahli".

This poem and picture are so wonderfully surreal i think your muse has artist links :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Well, that link must have gotten rusty than. lol :)
Thanks so much, Stella.
Stella Armour

9 Months Ago

Was different , made me sit up and take notice +(*_*)+
I love your posted image. So interesting to look at, especially the size of that underwater monster in comparison to the distant ship. Strong visuals of a wet day on Manhattan's streets. I like, "near buildings that sit like their sunken ships". And you turning into a paper fish on a wet sidewalk. Nicely composed.

Chris



Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks so much, Chris. :)
Wow, I don't even have words. This poem is all too fantastic! From the rhyming scheme to the imagery, well done Relic, well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks so much, Mary.
this reminds me of the book paper towns by John green. The girl in it, Margo, is this kinda rebellious girl withyhis philosophy. She hates normal lives, just to be anoter face in the crowd. She tells the boy, quinn at te top of a tower to look at the paper people in a paper town. That it's all pretty from a distance but it's only ever paper. That's one of my favorite books and I enjoyed seeing a reminder of it in this poem :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


 Relic

10 Months Ago

Thanks, Sarah.

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