In The End

(poem/lyrics)

She's all alone this time around

Friends are no where to be found

She thinks to herself

About the mistakes that she's made

The ones that have made her so lonely today

Well it's a lonely a*s life

So you might as well swing with it

If not in the end you'll be the one that's just gonna lose it

When your all alone

No one to call apon

When you're all alone

In the end

She stares at her feet

So no one can see the tears

Still they can tell by all of the make up smears

She ruined everything

All the years didn't mean a thing

In the end

Well it's a lonely a*s life

So you might as well deal with it

If not in the end you'll be the one that

just can't handle it

When you're all alone

No one to call apon

When you're all alone

She's all alone

In the end

Reviews

[Chaoscaine]

Ok, three simple things. One; your should be you're. Two, 'that just can't handle it' should have it's own line in my opinion for flow and importance. And three, you really need to talk to a rock musician because I could hear the music vibrating from the words. It's simple and clear and should by on my ipod. Good work.

[samurai212]

I love it your talented :)

[Dom]

This was very emotional. I enjoyed it and I think this was an awesome write. Great job! :)

[Krista]

Its a very sad poem but very true for soem people including myself. Life can be very very lonely at times and seem as if there is nothing left to live for but you have to keep swinging it and keep going no matter what even when you don't want to. If everythign fails try and try again in other words.

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This is pretty cool.
"Well it's a lonely a*s life
So you might as well deal with it "

This type of write has been done many times before but you added a nice flare to it. Though I believe that lonely is just an opinion. You can be alone and not be lonely. It's all in your mind.

Keep up the great work!


-Elissa :D

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is very sad, but an excellent write

[Wunderlich]

The repetition creates a very strong emotional impact upon the reader, properly conveying the loneliness and desperation of the narrator. Well f*****g done.

[Zombeh]

Sad and sorrowful, but I love it. And I can actually imagine this as a song, in fact I see it more as lyrics that I do a poem. Great piece, I could feel the emotion that the girl had, it's very relatable. Keep it up! :D