Living Free

One with Nature

 

Been one and free

with a winter storm

touching your gentle skin of cold

 

Feeling this world of love

come, come to me and let be free

 

I am sorrender by concret walls

the wind play slowly with your soul

 

Lets play together in this road.

come,

come to me and enjoy.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Illegitimate Artist]

Well thats just damned fantastic! The first couple lines make me shiver just reading em' hehe. Lovely wording. Nice piece!

[Sierra,love]

what is this about?

this is very well written
id love to read more of what you have to offer

[Shadows of Sight]

May the stuffy dogs of Old Grammarians lay in graves! You captured nature! I felt the cold breeze and the love that abounds when bare feet touch nature's ground!
Wonderful write! :)

[Nova]

You know who cares what the other people say...yeah some words are misspelled but this was really good. Good job.

[Writer CW Kirkland]

I think I would have enjoyed this poem more if it had fewer grammar and spelling errors. Unfortunately, the errors were distracting, and I was not able to focus on the message in this poem. I think the form is good, and it does not seem forced (as one of the other reviews stated). It will be better with some corrections. Thanks for sharing your writing on the Cafe!

[B. Lapinski]

ya need a little more form or no form at all. some spelling issues. it seems like your trying to hard to be in the poem. let it out freely...never push from the gut. produce from the gut

[J. James Reider]

This is a very good piece. It has a certain haunting mystique. It feels a little cold and grey, but a little cold and grey never hurt anyone. (: