Presence and Salience

...with salience, slithering in betwixt sickly senses

            distracted         detracted from savory spirit

         which infuses the surroundings with sublimity

       now the abstraction mneumonic eclipses presence

             with prejudice

                                      avaricious and seeking

                                      rumps to hurdle

                         in other words...

                                   I wannabe post-posterior

                          but posteriors present themselves

                    perpetually

                    pre-emptive strike at all costs

                 exausts innocence emmaculate

       dividing objects fragment into symbols

            sexualized

      'f**k it all' our slogan of elegance and truth

                               an overcoming of gods

                          through unlocked elementality

      the sun not sought for warmth

                                     but coveted for fuel

 ...with salience the veiled serpent slithers throughout presence

              and usurps it

       divvying out its organs

       to the unsatiable mouths of past and future.

             

Reviews

[robin]

I thought this as you thought this and maybe we read each other
not in our words digital thick here and there on these flat screen lit pages
but in our souls like you like me brother, free like the sages
and feed it on the past and future
sucker illusion and gamble will never nurture
like the carefully melded words of one blood to another
relinquish control you mother
you father let it be
that sons and daughters wake their lives up
open there eyes up and see
the brilliance,
here and now

Robin

[DaniElle LaPointe]

I apologize first off that I am beneath the meaning in this piece. Although I love your alliteration, I do not get the gist... But overall I read, indulging myself in your vocabulary and layout... Thank you for sharing.

[Pleiades]

I like the complexity and the variance in the message that can be preceived. There is so much to be said in all the lines and every one makes you think. I too like how you convey the metaphor of snakes... both clever and true.

[Leah Simone]

We are a greedy bunch, tis true. I enjoyed the alliteration - it worked well with the slithering snake theme all evil temptation before the gorging masses. Also, I like that you repeated that hook line near the end. Great work, Brett - always a joy to read - you have such a unique voice.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

excellant message! filled with justifiable intellect