Decieving

Decieving

A Poem by Awaken the Sleepwalker

As lightening shone and thunder blew
I am born, and in plain view
I do the dance that dancers do
changing colors, yellow, white, and blue
I crash into the great unknown
The thunder is my quiet groan
I know that I am not alone
to share the chaos that I know I own
I know  that I am prone to destruction
my light may be my visual seduction
my bold introduction
This is the art of my horrible production

© 2010 Awaken the Sleepwalker


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It has a dark flair to it which I find very alluring~!

It also has rhythm and it flows very well. Good job =)

Posted 14 Years Ago


capturing! I don't know what it is that I love about this one, well then again, I do know. I sings to me. I am at a point in my life where I have to face a great struggle and there is no backing out. I made my choice and now I have to go through with it. I feel as if I am the one crashing into the great unknown. And I have my best friend at my side. I chose the path of a soldier and in July it will be seven months of one huge intense mental game. Keep it up! The way I took it might not be the way you intended it to be, but none-the-less I grabbed me.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice! I really liked this .. as Selene stated before I, the imagery is clear and the rhyme scheme well utilized -- I definitely encourage more of the same!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Awesome poem here. The imagery was clear with your word diction and smooth rhyming. I found it easy to read and imagine. Great write! ^-^

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Awaken the Sleepwalker
Awaken the Sleepwalker

Boonsboro, MD



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I'm a sophomore in college, and I'm an English major, aspiring to be a high school English teacher. I'd love to use that at an outlet for my writing as well. I've been writing for a while, and I've ha.. more..

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