The bête noir of life.

The bête noir of life.

A Poem by Jeremy Baker

A spark of darkness, burst into the light.
A whisper in the monstrous quiet.
My beautiful child is holding me and won't let go.
Daddy, I cleaned up the mess I made. Don't be angry.

Summertime fog in the sinking heat,
drowning in the open air, obscuring vision.
Echoes of ancient bellows, a tiny roar.
Daddy, it's me, your boy. See what I made at school?

Siren call from beyond the noose, calling, cajoling, beckoning me.
Sweet pain of dreamtime songs and truncated childhood.
Daddy, I love you, I won't let you go.
Daddy, why are your eyes leaking?

© 2014 Jeremy Baker


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As soon as I got the RR I had to read this. And I`m glad I did.
A tremendous write, a Plathian balance of inner emotion and external symbolic, packed in four perfectly balanced quatrains that make it even more poignant. Jeremy is a tremendous poet, an excellent write

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeremy Baker

5 Years Ago

Thank you Leslie, I'm really flattered and glad you enjoyed it. This one was unusually personal for .. read more



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I enjoyed this, emotive and visual, well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jeremy Baker

5 Years Ago

Thank you Rene :)
its a very good reflection of the latent emotions....i thoroughly enjoyed it...

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is a profound insight to things that aren't pleasant in life. The lost of parent naturally or in a freak accident can be traumatic but from suicide can be even more shocking and traumatizing. The mind of someone who is depressed is one that many can't understand unless they have felt it. This poem makes you read each line and analyze it. The poem as a whole is one that is emotional and makes you think.

Posted 5 Years Ago


What dark creatures haunt our worlds... our minds... devouring the light... and here we are moved over lifetimes... sorrows and suffering... So much pain...

Posted 5 Years Ago


I love the reflection here. It's so beautifully moving. Great work Jeremy! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


You always voiced in such a potent manner...emotively so. The reflection here and the contrast of inner and outer is striking, truly wonderful hon x

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jeremy Baker

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words, Poppy, much appreciated!
Ruth

5 Years Ago

My pleasure hon x
Such an intriguing title, reading this reminds me of Harry Chapin's Cat's in the Cradle. Outstanding!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jeremy Baker

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely review!
Frieda P

5 Years Ago

You're welcome Jeremy, muchy enjoy'd!
As soon as I got the RR I had to read this. And I`m glad I did.
A tremendous write, a Plathian balance of inner emotion and external symbolic, packed in four perfectly balanced quatrains that make it even more poignant. Jeremy is a tremendous poet, an excellent write

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeremy Baker

5 Years Ago

Thank you Leslie, I'm really flattered and glad you enjoyed it. This one was unusually personal for .. read more

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Jeremy Baker
Jeremy Baker

Busselton, South West, Australia



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I'm a former English & Literature teacher who has always enjoyed the magic, power and simple romance of words well written. My favourite writers include Pablo Neruda, Liam O'Flaherty, Anthony Eaton.. more..

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